Talk:Circinus/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wehwalt (talk · contribs) 21:18, 14 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll take this one.

Some comments:


 * Lede


 * You say it's Latin for compass. Is it worth adding an illustration of a compass at some point in the article, since you do not have large numbers of images? Ideally, a classic constellation image (forgive me, I don't know the technical term) showing it as a compass would be a nice thing to have, too.  Lacaille's perhaps? Don't feel you have to do this to get GA, just a suggestion or two.
 * I had mused on that actually...to balance astronomy-starfield type photos. Will have a think about some Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:07, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "and planetary nebula, NGC 5315, and a spiral galaxy." The multiple commas read oddly here.
 * I've just removed some commas Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:07, 15 March 2013 (UTC)

History
 * Is it known how it acquired its Latin name in 1763? Did Lacaille name it?  I would also suggest that this information works perhaps better at the end of the paragraph.
 * Yep, Lacaille named it and I've clarified that. I also moved that sentence to the end. Keilana&#124;Parlez ici 00:12, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Characteristics


 * "is hence visible only south of the 30° north latitude." I venture hesitantly into this technical bit of writing, but could the "the" be deleted?
 * No, you are right here, the "the" is in error.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:07, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Notable features


 * "the two orbit each other every 2000 years.[14] They orbit each other every 180 years." ahem
 * Aah, it's 180 years. Fixed. Keilana&#124;Parlez ici 00:33, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The system is over 3600 light years distant,[16] and would outshine Venus at magnitude -4.8 if it were 32 light years (10 parsecs) distant" suggest modification to avoid double "juggling"
 * Thank heavens for parallel latin- and anglo-saxon-derived words that mean the same....done Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:14, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "could intersect with the Earth's orbit that and generate a meteor outburst" I think tweaking is needed here.
 * duly twaeked Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:14, 15 March 2013 (UTC)

Quite good and understandable within my technical limits. I don't see anything else that would impede a GA.Wehwalt (talk) 21:18, 14 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Just the "orbit each other" with the widely varying figures.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:33, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed that, I've got no idea where the "2000" came from... Keilana&#124;Parlez ici 00:35, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Passed. Good luck with it.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:42, 15 March 2013 (UTC)