Talk:Circle the Drain (Katy Perry song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk • message • contribs • count  • [/wiki/Special:Log?user= logs ] • email) 02:55, 1 September 2011 (UTC)

Lead
I think so because it was posted on her official website when they announced it. Plus a Hung Medien website also has it up (http://www.lescharts.com/showitem.asp?interpret=Katy+Perry&titel=Circle+The+Drain&cat=s)
 * How are you sure that's the actual photography if this is a promo release?

done
 * I don't think "mainstream" is necessary

done
 * I definitely think you need to list the writers and produces in the lead

done
 * The song performed modestly commercially -> achieved modest charting

fixed
 * the singer on her 2011 world tour, California Dreams Tour. On the tour, the singer -> singer, tour, singer, tour

done
 * Concert reviewers had mixed feelings on her performances -> gave her performances mixed reviews

Background
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 * singer Katy Perry helped write the song -> makes it seems as though she had a very trivial role in its conception.Switch it up

done
 * remove reportedly, and write critics suggest

Composition
That would be lovely! The section with "You fall asleep during foreplay - I'm not gonna stay and watch you circle the drain, Watch you circle the drain" lyrics would be best because that is mentioned in the prose.
 * I think a music sample would be nice here. If you need help there, just list me what part and I'll upload it for you :)

fixed
 * is a sneerful rant song where -> needs citation

done
 * to have techno influences in it -> to have techno influences

done
 * All in, seventeen music engineers contributed to the track's composition -> this sentence is poorly placed. It should be back in the "Background" section, or somewhere else in the one, because you are going into critical detail, and this does not belong

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 * Per MoS, quotes within quotes appear in single line ("Mimi said, 'God Rachel' lol.)

Agreed
 * I say move that quote into the prose, and replace that spot with a music sample

Reception
fixed
 * Polarized? quite vague, try something else. After reading the section, I see the reviews as pretty mixed if anything


 * The photo doesn't show cartoonish meant, but candy?
 * A steak can be seen in the right-hand corner

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 * "Circle the Drain" offered as Perry -> "Circle the Drain" offered, as Perry

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 * because of such a high entry -> its kind of redundant with the following line, as you say it "the biggest jump"

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 * Enter the Hot 100.....?

Live performances
done
 * the set-list

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 * the rafters