Talk:Cistercian College, Roscrea

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Thanks to whomever formatted the page recently, its cleaned up a lot and looks great.

I'm a new user so wasn't sure how to do that myself!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 83.141.99.69 (talk • contribs) 07:48, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

Tone
This page reads like an advert. Needs re-writing or deletion.--Cros13 (talk) 19:10, 14 July 2008 (UTC)

Legendum (talk) 17:17, 29 June 2009 (UTC) I have removed some of the "advertising phrases" and replaced them with facts about the facilities of the school ? could someone feedback about how else the article could be improved, we can upload more images of the school, etc... I hope this helps,

Thanks,

Legendum (talk) 17:17, 29 June 2009 (UTC) Legendum (talk) 16:43, 14 July 2009 (UTC) Hi Lads can we have any feedback on the site as I dont believe it reads like an advertisement any more

Thanks,

Just a few points to note.

"It is our policy that as many as possible should have the opportunity to represent the school in a fixture list which includes second and third teams at the various age levels. The College also organises in house leagues & tournaments that allow the lads to compete and enjoy themselves when sports seasons come to a close." Wording suggests that a member of staff is speaking to the reader ("our policy", "the lads" etc.) To be encyclopedic this should probably be rectified.

"Both Irish, English and German..." - Grammar.

The horse cited as the College's horse was born in 1995 so it seems unlikely that it is still racing. This may not matter to the editors but it is worthy of note.

That is all for now but I will try to remember to check back and give it an actual thorough going over.

It does still, in places, read slightly like an advert but I am a past pupil myself so maybe I'm a bit more sensitive to these things. It would be worthy to have someone else go over it with a fresh eye I think. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.45.46.107 (talk • contribs) 12:50, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

Numbers crisis?
Should the diminishing numbers applying be mentioned?

Wasn't some of the 360 hectares sold off in the last few years? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 109.210.19.31 (talk) 14:25, 23 February 2014 (UTC)