Talk:Ciutat Morta/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review so far, the article is improved for it. I've answered everything with some queries, see what you think. Mujinga (talk) 11:51, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * re "expanding #Production to meet the third criteria" I added some lines yesterday and I've added some more today from the last review I found. I've also put in the academic analysis that was previously in further reading. I don't think this film will ever have a production section the size of say Blade Runner 2049, I'm happy the main aspects are covered. Back to you, thanks! Mujinga (talk) 11:38, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Improve the non-free use rationale for the poster with this template.
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Poster" "Promotional release poster"
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

" in the infobox. Use "plainlist" instead.
 * Don't use "
 * is this a MOS issue? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Well, it says on the film infobox template that plainlist is preferred, and it also helps mobile readers.
 * Those are good reasons, thanks. ✅ Mujinga (talk) 11:17, 21 March 2021 (UTC)


 * In the lead, remove the comma after "until 2015".
 * I've read it a few times, I prefer it with the comma. Could rephrase if it's a big issue. Might be a British English / US English thing? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The issue was that the sentence is kinda short, so a comma wasn't necessary.

Plot

 * This section is over 400 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
 * Remove the comma after "hit on the head".
 * agreed on that one Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after the first naming of Rodrigo Lanza.
 * in the brackets? I'd rather not add one there Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I see your point; it was an Oxford comma thing.


 * Remove the comma after "Alfredo Pestana".
 * that one seems good to keep since the commas are bracketing the names Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after "they looked".
 * i didn't add the comma but i did rephrase since the sentence was clunky Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "son of diplomat" "son of a diplomat"
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

Themes

 * Add a comma after "gentrification".
 * don't see the need for it, we must have different comma styles Mujinga (talk) 10:10, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yeah, it was another Oxford comma thing.


 * Other than that, this section looks good.

Production

 * "seven-storey" "seven-story"
 * "storey" is BrEng Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".
 * again, not seeing the need for it Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "decide" "decided"
 * ✅ good spot! Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * This section is extremely short, so try expanding it.
 * I'll have a look to see if there are any more sources since November when I wrote it. Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I've added a few more lines Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * added in the academic analysis from further reading Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * Add a comma after "June 8, 2013".
 * agreed! Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "action" "act"
 * yeah that makes sense Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "department" "Department"
 * rephrased tighter to source Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

Critical response

 * The word "onesidedness" doesn't sound right, so maybe reword it?
 * went back to the source, rephrased Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add more reviews (if possible).
 * I'll have another check although this is all I could find before Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * added two more reviews Mujinga (talk) 11:49, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * Remove the comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".
 * i rather keep it, since it provides a space for breath. Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after "Cs, PP".
 * i rather not add one Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)