Talk:Civil War Memorial (Savannah, Georgia)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 15:13, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this later today (after I, ironically, get out of my Civil War memory class, where we talk all about memorials and monuments).  Kncny11  (shoot) 15:13, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Specify that it was not only renamed but rededicated to resolve a discrepancy between the infobox and lede, where the first sentence of the lede says it honors soldiers, but the infobox specifies Confederate soldiers
 * Added to lede.

Background and dedication

 * "to erect the monument" "to erect it" to eliminate repetition of "the monument"
 * Done.
 * "raise more funds for the monument's completion" "raise more funds for its completion" to eliminate repetition of "the monument"
 * Done.
 * "requiring that the monument have" "requiring that it have" to eliminate repetition of "the monument"
 * Rephrased section.
 * ""due the common Confederate soldier."" ""due the common Confederate soldier"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done.
 * "By the Fall of 1874, the monument was completed" "The monument was completed by the fall of 1874"
 * Done
 * Mention a couple of the generals in attendance at the dedication
 * Added additional discussion on the ceremony, including several generals and the orator.
 * ""lacking in charm."" ""lacking in charm"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done.

Confederate Soldier statue

 * Some articles use De Renne, and some DeRenne. I'll trust whatever your source says
 * Clarify that "at his own expense" refers to De Renne, and not the statue soldier's expense.
 * Done.
 * For the statue, simply called Confederate Soldier, De Renne and Richards wanted to depict a battle-worn soldier, which was rare at the time, as few Confederate monuments depicted soldiers. Rephrase to reduce repetition of the word "soldier".
 * Slight rephrase, removed last use of the word "soldier".
 * ""... danced and fluted at home."" ""... danced and fluted at home"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done.
 * ""... manly struggle to avoid it."" ""... manly struggle to avoid it"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done.

Additional statues

 * Good!

Renaming and other proposed alterations

 * WL Charlottesville, Virginia
 * Done.
 * WL city council
 * Done.
 * "Savannah - Chatham" "Savannah–Chatham"
 * Done.

Vandalism

 * "as part of George Floyd protests occurring both nationwide and in Savannah" "during the nationwide George Floyd protests" (in Savannah is implied if it's nationwide)
 * Done.
 * " the statue of Silence" to eliminate repetition of "statue"
 * Done.
 * “Silence- No More” "Silence—No More" per MOS:DASH
 * Done.

General comments

 * Article is stable
 * Photos are relevant and available for use
 * Earwig score is decent at 36.7%

Putting on hold until all issues are resolved.  Kncny11  (shoot) 15:55, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Started to address the points you made here, should be finished by later today. Thanks for starting the review, and if there are any further issues, let me know! -JJonahJackalope (talk) 19:02, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Finished addressing the points you made in this review and added some information found in an additional source. I think it should be good to go now, and if there are any further concerns, please reach out. Again, thanks for the review. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 19:44, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Excellent! Everything looks good, and I'll pass the article now :)  Kncny11  (shoot) 19:48, 23 March 2021 (UTC)