Talk:Clavado en un Bar/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

Reviewing an article of yours; been a good amount of time since I had previously! --K. Peake 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Remove the mixing studio from the infobox, as that is different from recording
 * Why is Quinta Del Mar mentioned before Puerto Vallarta here but not in the body?
 * reggae rock → Reggae rock
 * Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina
 * Wikilink as Fher Olvera instead
 * Add a comma after fifth studio album
 * "It was written by the group's lead vocalist Fher Olvera who handled productions" → "The song was written by the band's lead vocalist Fher Olvera, who handled the production"
 * "The track was released as" → "It was released as"
 * Wikilink lead single
 * "the protagonist is" → "the protagonist is depicted as" or something similar, to be clear
 * "was met with positive reactions" → "received positive reactions" and start a new para here
 * Add after music critics, "who mostly praised..." whatever was highlighted the most
 * "received an" → "The song garnered an"
 * "Commercially, it peaked at number" → "In the United States, it peaked at numbers"
 * Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
 * "charts in the United States." → "charts, respectively."
 * ""Clavado en un Bar" was" → "The song was"
 * Remove Dominican Republic intro to the singer
 * "and peaked at number ten" → "and the version peaked at number 10" per MOS:NUM
 * Remove "in the US" at the end because we already know Billboard charts mentioned here are for that region

Background and composition

 * Remove the comma after fifth studio album
 * Mention that the studio is in Quinta Del Mar, Puerto Vallarta
 * I can't access the El Norte source so don't know what that says about studios, but why are some from AllMusic not included?
 * Pipe mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Remove lead vocalist introduction because that being in the lead is sufficient
 * Pipe punk to Punk rock
 * If the lyrics end with a full sentence quoted, punctuation should be inside the quote for "you come rescue me."

Promotion and reception

 * Wikilink lead single
 * "for song was filmed which" → "for the song was filmed that same year, which" per the source
 * Add the word "about" after commented
 * "and again at the" → "before performing the songs again at the"
 * "the catchy rocker".[13] Burr" → "the catchy rocker",[13] while Burr"
 * "of the Fresno Bee" → "of The Fresno Bee" with the wikilink
 * Wikilink the Rolling Stones
 * "that the song was" → "that the song is"
 * "It also peaked" → "The song also peaked"
 * The ASCAP award should be at the start of the second para instead
 * "at number ten on" → "at number 10 on" per MOS:NUM
 * "from the episode" → "for the episode"
 * Pipe of the same name to Clavado En Un Bar (New Girl) per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "where it played" → "where it was played"

Formats and track listings

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * quickly following the review's opening! --K. Peake 10:27, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
 * ❌ now, as it's been over two weeks without a response... --K. Peake 09:50, 31 January 2022 (UTC)