Talk:Cliché (Hush Hush)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 21:11, 24 September 2016 (UTC)

Carbrera, Any chance you'll get to this soon? Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:24, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Of course! Sorry for the delay! Carbrera (talk) 05:01, 17 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Carbrera Not wanting to bother you, but there are two weeks gone since your last message. Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:51, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * Remove the extra space in between the quotation mark and Cliché (Hush Hush) in the infobox
 * "with her also appearing injured on various Romanian television" --> This sentence doesn't make sense
 * "the singer eventually decided to take a break from her career." --> "Due to this, the singer eventually decided to take a break from her career."
 * "Meanwhile, Cliché (Hush Hush), her last record under Prodan's label—Maan Studio—was made available for consumption in Japan on 2 October 2013;[1]" --> This sounds like it was released as a studio album rather than a reissue of one
 * "three songs" --> "three new songs" (Does this sound alright to you?)
 * "The physical edition of Cliché (Hush Hush)" --> "The physical edition of the record"
 * " it peaked at number one in Bulgaria,[13] and within the top forty in Hungary,[14] Italy,[15] Japan[16] and Slovakia,[17] being eventually certified Gold by the Federation of the Italian Music Industry (FIMI) for selling 15,000 copies in Italy.[18." --> Perhaps break this up into two sentences? It's a bit long and crowded
 * "comparasion" --> Not a word (Did you mean "comparisons"?)
 * I think this is clear; that's what the translated source says. She kinda looks like in a scene of vampire films here. Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:08, 30 October 2016 (UTC)


 * "vampire films for teenagers" --> What do you mean by this?
 * "A "club-friendly" electro dance recording,[23] the last single from Cliché (Hush Hush) premiered on 1 May 2013,[6] featuring the vocal collaboration of Prodan's fictional character, Manilla Maniacs.[3]" --> "A "club-friendly" electro dance recording,[23] the last single from Cliché (Hush Hush) premiered on 1 May 2013[6] and featured the vocals of Prodan's fictional character, Manilla Maniacs.[3]"
 * You should probably state the name of the single in the above sentence because without it, it sounds quite confusing
 * "The song's music video was compared to the works of Madonna, while its choreography to Michael Jackson's 1980s material.[23]" --> Note who made this comparison since there seems to be only one person who thought this
 * The "Credits and personnel" section should be placed below "Track listing"
 * "All lyrics written by Nemirschi and Prodan, unless stated.[3]" --> "All lyrics written by Andrei Nemirschi and Prodan, unless stated.[3]" (You never mentioned this Andrei Nemirschi guy until now)
 * Remove the title of the album before " – Standard version[1]" to remain consistent
 * I believe you could combine the two charts for "Release history"