Talk:Clock Tower (Central University of Venezuela)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:13, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:13, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "Its twisted columns were designed with new structural engineering principles." - Maybe explain briefly what these new structural engineering principles were
 * The briefest I could come up with would be "...new structural engineering principles whereby torsion is used to support deliberately twisted bases." But I think that opens more questions than just leaving it for the reader to read in the article. Can add if you think it's suitable. Kingsif (talk) 22:36, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * Modernism doesn't need to start with a capital letter
 * ""Synthesis of the Arts"; combining the arts and architecture and creating artistic pieces" - the semi-colon should be replaced by a comma
 * "that could also serve functional purposes." - serve as
 * Done the first two, the last is wrong (something serves a purpose, never serves as a purpose) Kingsif (talk) 22:37, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Design and symbolism

 * "it is said to further emphasize the purpose of clocks " - said by whom?
 * "they are typically on the facade of another important building" - an
 * "the sound system was damaged in 2002 but is also still used." - also continues to be used. for variety
 * Done Kingsif (talk) 22:40, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Structure

 * "Otaola has said of the process that when presented with Villanueva's designs" - the text in bold isn't needed
 * "Villanueva's designs he did not change anything fundamental about the piece," - tower
 * "when contributing to the build of General Rafael Urdaneta Bridge, spanning Lake Maracaibo." - build of the
 * "The techniques (based on Otaola's plans) were revolutionary at the time." - according to whom?
 * Done the first and last; it's more an artistic piece than just a tower, and adding 'the' would be appropriate if 'Bridge' was 'bridge', but it's not (General Rafael Urdaneta Bridge is a proper noun, if it were 'General Rafael Urdaneta bridge', it would be 'the X bridge'. Image it with Buckingham Palace - "build of Buckingham Palace", not "build of the Buckingham palace") Kingsif (talk) 22:47, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Legacy

 * "The clock tower is said to be" - said by whom?
 * "an obligatory reference point within the facilities of the Central University of Venezuela and one of the best known points of the city of Caracas", as well." - the text in bold is unneeded
 * The second sentence should be merged into the first to eliminate stubby one-line paragraphs
 * Done Kingsif (talk) 22:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)