Talk:Clown (Mariah Carey song)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 04:41, 20 June 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
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 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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I am seeing that there is an active GAN opened since May. Might you please explain? Ippantekina (talk) 04:42, 20 June 2023 (UTC)
 * There were no comments in two weeks so I closed it as per WP:GAN/I. Heartfox (talk) 15:35, 20 June 2023 (UTC)

Overall a well-written article, but I do have a few suggestions re the prose:
 * "Clown" is an answer song that addresses comments rapper Eminem made about her in the media and on The Eminem Show (2002) track "Superman" → "Clown" is an answer song to the comments that rapper Eminem made about Carey in the media and on the 2022 track "Superman"
 * Done
 * and "The Night I Fell in Love" by the Pet Shop Boys → the Pet Shop Boys' "The Night I Feel in Love" to make it consistent
 * Done
 * Also consider adding release years to the said songs
 * Added
 * "Carey performed "Clown" in a circus-themed segment during the 2003–2004 Charmbracelet World Tour while two puppeteers controlled an Eminem look-alike on stage." → On the Charmbracelet World Tour, Carey performed... while...
 * Done
 * "while promoting the project" → promoting the album
 * Done
 * "It features background vocals by Carey and Trey Lorenz" → The song features
 * Done
 * I wouldn't cite the lyrics from the booklet (WP:NOTLYRICS) unless they were quoted and discussed by the scholarly sources/reviews
 * I cut down on the lyrics
 * "a worthy exception to the album's formula" any more context as to what "formula" means here?
 * Added a note and changed "formula" to "theme"
 * Not sure if "juxtaposed with" is the right wording... I'd just use "compared to"
 * Done
 * Rest of prose looks good! Kudos to the scholarly sources that you found :) Ippantekina (talk) 08:57, 22 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the very helpful comments, . Heartfox (talk) 18:09, 24 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work, . I did a quick spotcheck and no issues turned out. Sourcing is appropriately formatted. The article looks ready for a GA :) Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 07:12, 26 June 2023 (UTC)