Talk:Club Future Nostalgia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:24, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Haven't reviewed one of your articles for a while, so I thought I would take this on --K. Peake 12:24, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Hey, thanks so much for taking this on. I just wanted to let you know that there was recently an edit war between two users on this page. It has since been resolved but it did happen when the page was nominated for GA. I am unsure if this qualifies as a quick fail, but if it does I completely understand, I'll just re-nominate it. Thanks again! LOVI  33  13:30, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Being that this happened for a period of only one day and was nearly three weeks ago, it does not meet the criteria for a quick fail but thanks for notifying me to verify! --K. Peake 13:35, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
 * thats great! Thanks so much. LOVI  33  13:40, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Too many producers per Template:Infobox album
 * Should I remove some? LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "A DJ Mix edition of the album was" → "A DJ Mix edition of it was" with the target
 * "second studio album Future Nostalgia," → "second studio album, Future Nostalgia (2020),"
 * "by an assortment" → "with the remixes being created by an assortment"
 * "It also includes guest appearances from" → "Guest appearances are included from"
 * "that was noted for..." remove this part since it is rewording the bit before
 * "The album was met with generally" → "The album received generally" and add a bit about what was praised
 * "the Canadian Albums Chart. The album also became" → "the Canadian Albums Chart, while becoming"
 * "on the US Top Dance/Electronic Albums charts, where it reached the summit." → "on the US Top Dance/Electronic Albums chart, reaching the summit on the chart."
 * "which was originally from the super deluxe edition of Lipa's debut album," → "with the original version of the song being released on the super deluxe edition of Lipa's debut studio album,"
 * "featuring Madonna and Elliott was" → "featuring Madonna and Elliott, was"
 * "Club Future Nostalgia was accompanied by a visualizer," → "Alongside the single, a visualizer was released for promotion," to avoid mentioning the album title again, though maybe re-word this if it sounds like the visualizer was for the single
 * Changed to "Alongside the single, a visualizer for the album was released for promotion," LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

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Conception
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 * Retitle to Background and conception
 * Img text needs a full-stop at the end
 * "Dua Lipa was unable to tour" → "Lipa was unable to tour"
 * Identify the COVID-19 pandemic as ongoing"
 * "listening to the album" → "listening to Future Nostalgia"
 * "an "old school"" → "an "old-school"" since that is the source direct quote
 * "from Future Nostalgia, with" → "from the album, alongside"
 * "The two met at" → "The two of them met at"
 * "before running into one and other" → "before they ran into one each other"
 * "in May 2020," → "around May 2020,"
 * "She took on" → "She handled"
 * "for the album." → "for Club Future Nostalgia."
 * "From the beginning," → "From the beginning of creation,"
 * "wanted on the album, with many already being" → "wanted for the album, many of whom had already been"
 * "worked from her" → "worked on Club Future Nostalgia from her"
 * "consisting of breaking down" → "that consisted of breaking down"
 * "engineers, waiting on" → "engineers while waiting on"

Production
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 * This should be its own section, though stay directly under the above two paras
 * "merging it with" → "merging the remix with"
 * "although, mostly Hoshino's remix" → "though mostly Hoshino's remix"
 * "She also pitched up the synth part of" → "She also increased the pitch of the synth part from" with the targets
 * Add release year of "Moments in Love" in brackets
 * ""Buffalo Stance" to create a radio interlude." → ""Buffalo Stance" (1988), which was used to create a radio interlude."
 * "in the verses, and adding a break" → "in the verses, as well as a break"
 * Add release year of "Think (About It)" in brackets
 * "on Club Future Nostalgia." → "from Club Future Nostalgia." on the img main text
 * "is one of her reference points," → "was one of her reference points for Club Future Nostalgia,"
 * "of "Cosmic Girl", which only appears" → "of the band's "Cosmic Girl" (1996), which apparently only exists"
 * Target vinyl to Phonograph record
 * "up with "Break My Heart"." → "up with "Break My Heart" to create a remix."
 * "originally created it as" → "originally created the remix as"
 * "the two sent their" → "the two of them sent their"
 * "where she ended up" → "who ended up"
 * "mixed down the song, and handled" → "mixed down the song, while also handling" with the target
 * "attempting some club-style concepts along with" → "attempting to place some club-style concepts alongside"
 * "where both her and" → "which led to both her and"
 * "had a lot of" → "having a lot of"
 * "she found difficult to make" → "she found difficult to reimagine"
 * "in the remix." → "for the remix."
 * Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
 * "be on it after being approached" → "be on the remix, after having been previously approached"
 * "quickly worked her in." → "quickly included her on."
 * "expressed her desire" → "expressed a desire"
 * "her past collaborations," → "her past features and collaborations,"
 * "the song with" → "the song with parts of"
 * Add release year of "Rise" in brackets
 * "ultimately placed on the record." → "ultimately included on Club Future Nostalgia."
 * "each track, by chopping" → "each track by chopping"
 * Target DJ Mix to DJ mix

Composition
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 * "remixes Lipa's "Good in Bed"" → "remixed Lipa's "Good in Bed"" on the img main text
 * "several different subgenres including" → "several different subgenres, including"
 * [5][12][8] should be put in numerical order
 * "jubilant" should be in speech marks
 * ""Cool" remixed by Jayda G," → "Jayda G's "Cool" remix,"
 * "Zach Witness and Gen Hoshino's remix of" → "Witness and Hoshino's remix of"
 * "nimbly" should be in speech marks
 * "of Midland and Masters at Work." → "of Midland and Masters at Work, respectively."
 * Target New York house to Garage house
 * "takes on bleep-house and" → "is a take on bleep-house, and"
 * [16][6] should be put in numerical order
 * "remixed by Zach Witness has a club" → "remixed by Witness, has a club" with the target
 * "Baltimore sound with a" → "Baltimore sound, with a"
 * "and features a" → "and it features a"
 * Target symphonic to Symphony
 * "its production also uses" → "its production uses"
 * Target cowbells to Cowbell (instrument)
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * [12][14][6] should be put in numerical order
 * "squelchy" should be in speech marks
 * "Horse Meat Disco introduces" → "Horse Meat Disco introduce"
 * "to the song," → "for the remix"
 * "the second parts drops" → "the second part drops"
 * "that makes the former track" → "which makes the former"
 * [14][7] should be put in numerical order
 * "remix featuring Madonna and Missy Elliott spans" → "remix, featuring Madonna and Elliott, spans"
 * "future bass and techno" → "future bass, and techno"
 * "production consisting of" → "production that consists of"
 * ""Hallucinate" remixes by Mr Fingers titled "deep striped" → "A remix of "Hallucinate" by Mr Fingers entitled "deep stripped"
 * "and Paul Woolford's extended" → "and Woolford's extended"
 * "On his remix," → "With his remix,"
 * "gurgling" should be in speech marks
 * Target gospel to Gospel music
 * [10][16][6] should be put in numerical order
 * [5][14][7] ditto
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * [10][5][6] should be put in numerical order
 * "Mark Ronson's midtempo "Physical" remix featuring Gwen Stefani" → "Ronson's midtempo "Physical" remix that features Stefani"
 * [12][6] should be put in numerical order
 * "It is described" → "It was described"
 * "feel, and incorporated" → "feel, and incorporates"
 * Remove wikilink on disco
 * [10][5][14] should be put in numerical order
 * "of the album closes with "Break My Heart", remixed by Moodymann" → "of Club Future Nostalgia closes with a remix of "Break My Heart" by Moodymann,"
 * Target looped to Loop (music)
 * Target Detroit house to Detroit techno
 * "it includes a" → "the remix includes a"
 * Wikilink hi-hats

Release and promotion
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 * "the remix along with" → "the remix, along with"
 * "by Mark Ronson featuring Gwen Stefani," → "by Ronson featuring Stefani,"
 * "remix album of Future Nostalgia," → "remix album for Future Nostalgia,"
 * "21 August 2020, however on 10 August 2020," → "21 August 2020; however, 11 days earlier,"
 * "the album was being delayed a week" → "Club Future Nostalgia was being delayed by a week"
 * "of every track on the record." → "for every track on it."
 * "through Warner Records" → "by Warner Records"
 * Wikilink record label
 * [36][2] should be put in numerical order

Singles and other songs

 * "featuring Madonna and Missy Elliott was released as the album's" → "that features Madonna and Elliott was released as Club Future Nostalgia's"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "serving as the" → "which served as the"
 * The original version's single release is not backed up by [37]
 * Forgot that, my bad. LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

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 * "It reached 10 on" → "The remix reached number 10 on"
 * "singles chart[38] and" → "chart,[38] and"
 * "peaking at 99" → "peaking at number 99"
 * "The remix was promoted with an accompanying music video, directed" → "An accompanying music video was released, which was directed"
 * "although, Elliott and Lipa's boyfriend Anwar Hadid make" → "though Elliott and Lipa's boyfriend Anwar Hadid both make"
 * "Mark Ronson's "Physical" remix featuring Gwen Stefani" → "Ronson's "Physical" remix, featuring Stefani,"
 * "is a part of the FIFA 21 soundtrack." → "is a part of the soundtrack for FIFA 21 (2020)."

Visualizer

 * Img main text needs a full stop and can you source the text?
 * Did the full stop, but per MOS:PLOTSOURCE, a video's plot doesn't necessarily need to be sourced as the visual is assumed as its primary source. LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

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 * "of the album was" → "of Club Future Nostalgia was"
 * "to get animators" → "to try and get animators"
 * "thirteen different artists." → 13 different artists."
 * "home cities which included" → "home cities, which included"
 * "Ghent and London." → "Ghent, and London."
 * "are also included, which were directed by Blink's Will Hooper." → "are included, which were directed by Hooper."
 * "the "Levitating" music video as well as" → "the music video for the remix of "Levitating", as well as"
 * "Lipa with her boyfriend Anwar Hadid." → "Lipa with Hadid."

Critical reception
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 * Target Tom Hull – on the Web to Tom Hull (critic)
 * "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
 * "average score of 81 based on 7 reviews," → "average score of 81, based on 7 reviews." with the target
 * Remove the indicates part since that is not notable
 * "However, other aggregators..." remove this part but keep the rest of the sentence
 * "praised it for getting" → "praised the album for getting"
 * "than the original Future Nostalgia." → "than Future Nostalgia."
 * "and praised it for" → "and praised the album for"
 * "didn't hit the heights" → "didn't hit the proper heights"
 * "found the remix inessential" → "found Club Future Nostalgia inessential"
 * "rap sample in" → "rap sample on"
 * "the most enjoyable DJ sets," → "the best DJ sets,"
 * "negative review from" → "negative review at"
 * "He elaborated by criticizing" → "He elaborated, criticizing"
 * "that makes it feel" → "that makes the album feel"
 * "fun but less than" → "fun, but less than"
 * "failed to meet the success of" → "failed to live up to"
 * "to its "lack" → "to "its lack"
 * "the album did not blend the styles" → "Club Future Nostalgia did not properly blend the styles"
 * Target Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT

Commercial performance
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 * [56] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Wikilink album-equivalent units
 * "it became both Lipa" → "the album became both Lipa"
 * "in the top position," → "at the top position,"
 * "the album reached" → "Club Future Nostalgia reached"
 * "It spent only one week on all charts" → "The album spent only one week on all the respective charts"

Track listing
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 * The Monsters & Strangerz should only be targeted to once under songwriters
 * Same as above for TMS (production team)
 * Wikilink Green Velvet
 * Target Daniel Traynor to Grades (record producer)

DJ Mix edition

 * Any specific order here?
 * alphabetical based on credit besides Lipa and The Blessed Madonna. Credit order is: artists, producers, then remixers. LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Visualizer

 * Good

Standard edition
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 * This should be in-between DJ Mix edition and Visualizer here
 * Any specific order here?
 * Same as above. LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * but do not feel afraid to ask me about anything that is confusing and make sure to clarify wherever I have requested for you to do so. --K. Peake 08:42, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Any updates on this? --K. Peake 06:08, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Hey sorry its taking so long. I'll try to get it done in the next day or two.  LOVI  33  12:03, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for another amazing review! I have addressed all your suggestions. The only thing I was confused about is what you want me to about the producers in the infobox. Let me know if you want me to do anything else. LOVI  33  16:50, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ after your well-timed response and some copy-editing from me! --K. Peake 18:37, 24 October 2020 (UTC)