Talk:Cobra Crack/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 21:24, 25 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 17:33, 21 June 2024 (UTC)


 * @Aszx5000 Here are my comments for now. Hope they can be addressed! Arconning (talk) 14:04, 22 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for that @User:Arconning, I have made them all with just one question on paraphrasing the quote from Trotter. Much appreciated. Aszx5000 (talk) 15:25, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

 * Remove sourcing for "Grade", "First ascent", and "First free ascent", as they are all mentioned in the body.


 * Please mention the location of the climb in the body and source it there instead rather than the infobox.


 * After repulsing many leading climbers – most notably by Swiss climber Didier Berthod in 2005 – Canadian climber Sonnie Trotter made the first free ascent in 2006., replace repulsing with something more formal, then replace the endashes with commas.


 * 5.14b (8c), add comma at the end.

History

 * Proseline. Probably integrate the years within the paragraph rather than at the starting point.
 * ✅, I had to re-word the first paragraph's two lead sentences to make it flow


 * free the route, I'm guessing this refers to free climbing? Hyperlink if so. Also reword to "free climb the route".
 * ✅, and hyperlinked

Route

 * The route has an abrasive surface, add comma at the end.


 * circa 30 metres, circa 45 degrees, use a c. template.


 * extremely difficult (and painful), remove parenthesis.


 * The technical crux, is crux a climbing term? If so, hyperlink as well.


 * In 2006, Trotter said: "The redpoint crux comes over the lip on a slippery side pull; the feet are next to nothing, and it takes momentum and a huge throw to latch the final edge, at which point you're about 15 to 20 feet about your last piece of gear—it's really exciting"., I think you should paraphrase the quote.
 * ❌, Trotter is a major figure in climbing, so I though it was good to quote his reaction, i.e. direct "from the horse's mouth" so to speak? If you feel strongly however I can paraphrase? thanks
 * That's fair.

Legacy

 * beautiful as ever"., put period within the quotes as it's stated as such in the source.

Ascents

 * Would like to know why there are two 1sts mentioned.
 * ✅, clarified that the first one was as a aid climbing route, but the rest are free climbing

Filmography

 * Year before role, "Documentary (2005), Director”. Manual of Style/Lists of works


 * Add endash at the end to break up notes. First Ascent: The Movie (2005), Peter Mortimer. Sender Films. ASIN B000IWPP4G. – Documentary with Didier Berthold.

Images

 * Images have proper licenses, relevant.
 * Probably change the first image's caption to "Crack seen from the ground".

Refs

 * Manual check, everything seems okay.
 * Earwig picks up quotes, pass.

Spotchecks

 * Random references check, 5, 14, 18, 24, all seem good.

Misc

 * No ongoing edit war, article is focused and broad on the topic being discussed.