Talk:Cockroach/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 02:54, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

 * I haven't read it yet, but the one thing I noticed was that the In research section was just one sentence, so consider expanding that (if you can); expand in areas such as: why do people research on cockroaches opposed to other insects, and what discoveries have been made (that benefit humans)
 * @Dunkleosteus77: Added a section on its convenience and use in education. The major discovery areas have already been listed and wikilinked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:13, 7 December 2015 (UTC)


 * and, since the As pests and Control are basically talking about the same thing, consider merging them.
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:00, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Done a few edits, although I cannot guarantee that I removed all British English spelling. Please double check. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
 * There is a mish-mash of American and British English; I'm seeing "generalised", "generalized" (in the same paragraph), "realised", "colors", "recognize", "characterised", "specialisation", and "behavior"


 * It'll pass
 * Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 9 December 2015 (UTC)

General comments
In the section on biological control the ""House Centipede" namely Scutigera coleoptrata, is known to feed on cockroaches.
 * In the lead, change "...which however also includes the termites" to "...which also includes termites"
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:37, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "However recent genetic evidence..." to "However, recent genetic evidence..."
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:38, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "...when F. A. McKittrick noted similar..." to "...when F. A. McKittrick (1965) noted similar..."
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:38, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Description section, include the weight of Blaberus giganteus
 * Removed mention of its weght. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:51, 3 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Description section, change :They have relatively small heads and broad, flattened bodies, and..." to "They have a relatively small head and a broad, flattened body, and..."
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:00, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Description section, change "The tegmina or first pair of wings are tough and protective..." to "The tegmina, or first pair of wings, are tough and protective..."
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:43, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Description section, change "...have demonstrated they help..." to "...have demonstrated that they help..."
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * n the Description section, change "Males have a aedeagus..." to "Males have an aedeagus..."
 * Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:43, 2 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Collective decision-making section, explain what happened in the roach-robot experiment
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:07, 2 December 2015 (UTC)

Expect more comments, I haven't finished reading yet.
 * Thanks for taking this on. We look forward to your additional comments. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:41, 2 December 2015 (UTC)

2nd set of comments

 * In the Social behavior section, change "...the sum of individual choices but reflects..." to "...the sum of individual choices, but reflects..."
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:08, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Social behavior section, put the last paragraph, second seconds, in quotes using template insert quote and source, and also state who said it
 * Done . Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:22, 6 December 2015 (UTC)
 * I have stated "Lihoreau and his fellow researchers stated:", and if they didn't say it, then I don't know who did. I haven't got access to the research study. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:04, 7 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Sounds section, change "...in the presence of a potential mate some..." to "...in the presence of a potential mate, some..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * Instead of wikilinking American cockroach in the Digestive track section, wikilink it in the Social behavior
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Digestive track section, change "...(Periplaneta americana) for example feeds..." to "...(Periplaneta americana), for example, feeds..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Digestive track section, change " In many species these..." to " In many species, these..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Digestive track section, change "...the wood-eating cockroach Panesthia cribrata is able..." to "...the wood-eating cockroach, Panesthia cribrata, is able..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Digestive track section, change " It my be that..." to " It may be that..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Reproduction section, change "...keeping the eggs inside their bodies..." to "...keeping the eggs inside their body..."
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Hardiness section, change "P. japonica" to "Periplaneta japonica", since the genus wasn't stated
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:09, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the As pests section, change "sodium bicarbonate (baking soda)" to "sodium bicarbonate (baking soda)"
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:10, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the Conservation section, what does NSW stand for?
 * Done, linked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:11, 5 December 2015 (UTC)


 * In the In culture section, change " 'For tetanus cockroach tea is given...' " to " 'For tetanus, cockroach tea is given...' "
 * No, it's as it is in the original, inside quotation marks. I've added a comment to this effect. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 5 December 2015 (UTC)