Talk:Coldest Winter (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 13:39, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

I'm bored, let's do this. – zmbro (talk) 13:39, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * I've gone ahead and made a few changes myself
 * Rest looks solid

Background and recording

 * "after persuasion from Malik Yusef" can we change it to just Yusef?
 * That's not his real surname, so the current version is preferable. --K. Peake 15:49, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * Studios are listed here so why aren't they in the infobox?
 * ✅ must have missed this by accident --K. Peake 15:49, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

 * Does Apple Music count as a source for genres?
 * It is the notes that are being used as a source, not the genre sidebar, so yes this is reliable. --K. Peake 15:51, 22 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hmm, I'll have to keep that in mind. – zmbro (talk) 19:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Release and reception

 * Section looks good

Music video

 * "written by Elderkin and he called it" feels like a run-on sentence; I'd reword.
 * ✅ split into two sentences --K. Peake 16:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "was featured more in it before parts were taken out" reads odd. There's a better word that could be used here, right?
 * ✅ with changes --K. Peake 16:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "said the mix is "gloomier and more foreboding" than the song" → "said the mix is "gloomier and more foreboding" than the original mix"
 * ✅ with a change --K. Peake 16:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "to the "dark" song" can we use a synonym for dark? So we're not directly quoting one word
 * "Continuing his review, Dombal" → "Furthermore, he"
 * ✅ for the above --K. Peake 16:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "She explained, depicting West's "own mug" being replaced with "a cleavage-baring, Leona Lewis look-a-like in the spooky, surreal vid" as a smart strategy from him" this whole sentence should be rephrased to something like " She felt that depicting West's "own mug" being replaced with "a cleavage-baring, Leona Lewis look-a-like in the spooky, surreal vid" was a smart strategy from him"
 * ✅ with changes --K. Peake 16:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Live performances and other usage

 * "campaign by performing the song" → "campaign with a performance of "Coldest Winter"."
 * ✅ --K. Peake 16:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * Why does this whole section use his first name? This can easily be fixed just by changing instances of "Donda" to "his mother"
 * MOS:SAMESURNAME, also Donda is introduced as his mother a few sections back so it would read awkwardly to all of a sudden use this instead. --K. Peake 16:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "mock snow fell down" the second instance of "fell down". I'd use a synonym
 * ✅ --K. Peake 16:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Looks good

Final thoughts

 * Overall well done. Once these are resolved, it should be a GA in no time. Hope you're doing well man! – zmbro (talk) 14:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I have now covered everything, do you have any concerns still? --K. Peake 16:55, 22 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Nope. ✅ – zmbro (talk) 19:18, 22 September 2021 (UTC)