Talk:Colin Falkland Gray/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:34, 4 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Link North Sea
 * Link Yorkshire at the first mention, not the second
 * "Flying another Spitfire, he had to make a forced landing when his engine was damaged following an encounter with Bf 109s over Biggin Hill" - This still on August 31?
 * Yes, I have clarified this a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Gray was promoted to flight lieutenant in August 1941,[26] The same month" - Looks like this comma should probably be a period.
 * "Gray spent a short period of time at No. 485 Squadron, largely made up of New Zealand flying personnel before taking command of No. 64 Squadron," - Comma after personnel
 * "which was based in Algeria and was the first unit in the Middle East to fly the Spitfire Mk. IX" - Algeria isn't really in the Middle East
 * I see your point. I have rephrased this a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Although he made no official claim for this encounter,[30], " - Drop the second comma
 * Link George VI.
 * Link Buckingham Palace
 * If his command served at Arnhem, should Market Garden be added to the list of campaigns in the infobox?
 * Is there a link for secondment? If not, can you briefly gloss it?
 * Is cause of death known?
 * Unfortunately no. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Given the relative length of the article, the lead's a bit on the short side.
 * I have expanded the lead a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)


 * While the DNZB source gives date of death as 1 August, the Independent gives 2 August
 * I think that must be in error - The DNZB says 1 August as does an online record for the cemetery where he is buried. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

That's about it. Placing on hold for these to be sorted out. Hog Farm Bacon 15:08, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have actioned the above and made a few comments as well. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)