Talk:Collin Balester/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

I accidentally had too much fun at the local Irish pub tonight, so I will probably be reviewing this during teacher in-service time tomorrow. —  Ghost River  02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Add "from 2008 to 2015" for the MLB sentence, either at the start or after the words "Major League Baseball (MLB)"
 * Link the first instance of Prospect (sports) and designated for assignment in the lede

Early life

 * Link the first instance of surfboard
 * "His father makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold in most surf shops. Tom also runs a shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach." "His father runs a surfboard shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach, and also makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold widely in surf shops."
 * Use the "convert" template for "83mph" to make it 83 mph
 * Pipe "scout" to Scout (sports)
 * WL the first instance of shutout

2004–2007

 * Make sure you use an en dash instead of a hyphen for the subhead
 * Spell out the WHIP acronym the first time that it's introduced
 * Pipe "Washington" to Washington, D.C.
 * "expecting to not receive" "expecting not to receive" (I hear the voice of my mother telling me not to split my infinitives)
 * "A week after being named to the Futures Game Roster, Balester was..." "The following week, he was..."
 * "So eager was he to join the Clippers," "In his eagerness to join the Clippers,"
 * No comma needed after "Tampa Bay Devil Rays"

2008

 * Delink "striking out", already done in the early life section

2009

 * Pipe "rotation" to starting rotation
 * "for one of the final two spots"
 * Lowercase "spring" in the second sentence
 * "During Spring training, he went 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA, getting reassigned to the minors on March 28, though he remained a part of the organization's long-term plans." "After going 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA during spring training, he was reassigned to the minors on March 28, but remained a part of the organization's long-term plans."
 * Do we know what caused Zimmermann to go on the DL?
 * Comma after "from free agency and"

2010

 * "in order for him to convert to being a relief pitcher" "to begin the process of converting him to a relief pitcher"
 * Same as above, do we know why Atilano was hurt?
 * I don't think you need to mention that Weeks played the following day; it's certainly not recommended to start again right after getting nailed in the head, but I'm pretty sure Tatis just did it after Kennedy beanballed him
 * On second thought, maybe "Much like Weeks, Reynolds was fine" "Neither batter suffered a serious injury"

2011

 * I'm not sure the best way to reword this, but "to begin the season" shows up twice in consecutive sentences
 * Link the first instance of designated for assignment
 * Pipe "waivers" to Waivers (MLB)

Detroit Tigers

 * Delink DFA here, as it should be linked earlier

Texas Rangers organization

 * I'm wondering if there's more of a story here about the Tommy John surgery – did he leave the game with pain, had it been lingering? No worries if you can't find much more information, but worth checking out
 * Didn't see anything about him leaving the game with pain (though I'd imagine that he did), but I did put that he struggled in that game, as well as a quote from when he returned in 2015 (in the Reds section). Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:16, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
 * "In 6 games (5 starts) "In six games (five starts)" per MOS:NUMBERS

Pittsburgh Pirates organization

 * "After starting the 2014 season on the disabled list for the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, he rehabbed with a couple of rookie-level teams, then joined the Double-A Altoona Curve on July 31." "Although he was assigned to the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, Balester opened the season on the disabled list and did not start pitching until he underwent a rookie-level rehab assignment. On July 31, he joined the Double-A Altoona Curve."
 * Drop the context for Indianapolis in the second para, as you mentioned it in the first

Cincinnati Reds

 * "recording 7 saves" "and recorded seven saves"
 * "a tie game" "a tied game"
 * WL walk-off home run

Samsung Lions

 * "Making three starts for the Lions, he lost each of them, posting an 8.03 ERA." "He lost all three starts that he did make for the Lions, and recorded an 8.03 ERA in the process."
 * "and Balester considered retiring." "and Balester considered retirement."

Last professional season

 * I think you can shorten the WL to just "American Association", as that's what they tend to go by

Pitching style

 * Same as earlier, wherever a speed is listed, use the convert template to include the km/h as well
 * Elaborate on the back leg dropping – how specifically did that impact his release?
 * Source doesn't say. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:10, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * The part about his sister might fit better in the early life, with the other stuff about surfing
 * Where it says "grew his mustache again", there haven't been previous references to said mustache, so it flows awkwardly
 * I also assume this was a Movember thing, in which case that page should probably be linked

General comments

 * We're going to disregard the any issues from previous GA nominations have not been adequately addressed criteria, as the previous review was an auto-fail from literally a decade ago.
 * No stability issues (only one regular editor)
 * Pictures are both allowed for use and are relevant to the article, as they all relate to the subject
 * Earwig score looks good, the higher results are all attributed direct quotes

All the usual minor fixes – putting on hold for now, and ping me as always if you have questions! —  Ghost River  21:23, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Great work, passing now! —  Ghost River  15:27, 28 August 2021 (UTC)