Talk:Columbus nightclub shooting/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 05:17, 1 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) at 18:49, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

Will take a look soon! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:17, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

Prose
That is it! A very-well written article.
 * to prevent another such incident from occurring. → "to prevent another such incidents from occurring ."
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * with post traumatic stress disorder → "with post-traumatic stress disorder" (added hyphen)
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * responding to a 911 call — Can link it to 9-1-1
 * ✅ and made uniform throughout the body —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * 250 fans had purchased tickets — avoid start a sentence by a number.
 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * a 6 feet (1.8 m), 6 feet 3 inches (1.91 m) and weighting 266 pounds (121 kg) — feet is spelled but meter is in abbreviation. Same with pounds, kg.
 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * 23-year-old fan Nathan Bray leapt — avoid start a sentence by a number.
 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * where Abbott was pronounced dead at the age of 38. — I'd remove "at the age of 38". Maybe make it another sentence
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * and he told his employer, Rich Cencula, that he was schizophrenic. → "and informed his employer, Rich Cencula, of his condition." ('schizophrenic' is repeated here)
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * When Christina Grimmie was fatally shot by an obsessed fan during a meet ... — which year?
 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
 * The city of Columbus, Ohio template at the end of the article apparently doesn't has this incident linked. Either the article needs to be in the template, or the template doesn't need to be in the article.
 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

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 * —  Ghost River  16:34, 2 January 2022 (UTC)