Talk:Come Out and Play (Billie Eilish song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 07:53, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Will review this today; just remember, check you have done all of my points before marking them as done. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:53, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
Kyle Peake I cannot find any source for this.
 * Cover art needs alt text
 * Remove target to Billie Eilish under Songwriter(s)
 * Add a ref that supports the lowercase stylization; maybe write this out in the body somewhere?
 * The NME ref 12 works and remember to sign posts off like this --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:20, 2 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "The song was released" → "The song was released for digital download and streaming as a single" with the appropriate targets
 * Writing/production belongs as the second sentence instead
 * "who also produced the track" → "with the latter solely handling production"
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "Eilish's lyrics on the song" → "Eilish's lyrics within the song"
 * "including Eilish trying" → "including her attempting" to be less repetitive
 * "The track was released alongside" → "The song was released alongside"
 * "for which it provides the soundtrack" → "which it is used as the soundtrack for"
 * "The song received" → ""Come Out and Play" received"
 * "It charted in various countries including" → "The song charted in various countries, including"
 * "the United Kingdom and reached" → "the United Kingdom, and reached"
 * "The song was later included on the Japan" → "It was later included on the Japanese"
 * "of her debut studio album" → "of Eilish's debut studio album,"
 * "along with "When I Was Older"" → "along with her single "When I Was Older"." with the appropriate wikilink
 * Remove the compilation album sentence as this is irrelevant to the article
 * Spacing issues between the lead and the first section

✅

Background and composition

 * "Eilish and her brother were approached by Apple, who sent them" → "Eilish and her brother Finneas O'Connell were approached by Apple, with the company sending them" with the wikilink and target
 * "early version a festive commercial" → "early version of a festive commercial" with the target
 * "of the advert. It was recorded in their" → "of the advert, recording it in their"
 * Mention that the premiere was on November 20, 2018
 * "through record labels" → "through the record labels"
 * "on November 20, 2018" → "on the same day"
 * "as a standalone single" → "as a single" with the target
 * Mention when the edition was released
 * "the singer and her brother Finneas O'Connell, and he also" → "the singer and O'Connell, and he"
 * "by studio personnel, John Greenham" → "by the studio personnel John Greenham"
 * Paragraphs 2 and 3 should be in a separate section titled Composition and lyrics; the first section of para 1 should be titled Background and recording
 * "According to sheet music website Musicnotes.com," → "According to Musicnotes.com,"
 * Wikilink tempo to itself
 * Remove wikilink on beats per minute
 * "the notes of G3 and A$" → "the notes of G4 and A$"
 * "said the song has" → "said the song features"
 * "in it's instrumentation" → "in its instrumentation"
 * The Michigan Daily is an unreliable source since it's a student newspaper
 * "Eilish states:" → "Eilish stated:"
 * Remove targets on Apple and commercial
 * "the song is used, entitled "Share Your Gifts"." → "the song is used."
 * "Eilish encourages someone" → "She encourages someone"
 * "and overcome their fears:" → "and overcome fears:"
 * "mentions that Eilish's vocals" → "mentioned that Eilish's vocals"

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Reception and promotion

 * The Apple info belongs after the critical and commercial reception
 * Why is this touted as a music video when it's supposed to be for a soundtrack of the commercial? Keep the info but fix wording
 * "In it, people are scared" → "In the video, the characters are scared"
 * "come out show their talents to the world" → "show their talents to the world"
 * "as Eilish sings lyrics" → "while Eilish sings lyrics"
 * Remove target on music critics
 * "and he wouldn't be" → "and said he would not be"
 * Try to replace The Michigan Daily review with another, since the song received adequate coverage
 * ""Come Out and Play" debuted at number 69" → "The song debuted at number 69"
 * Target to Billboard Hot 100 should be on Billboard Hot 100
 * "The song also charted in" → "The song further charted in"
 * If these are sorted alphabetically, put the Netherlands inbetween Latvia and Sweden
 * Mention what the certification of 80,000 denotes, indicates, or whatever the correct wording is in this context

✅

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * even though a lot of the criteria points are currently not met, you aren't too far off on them. --Kyle Peake (talk) 12:08, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Hot New Hip Hop → reliable source, should be added. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:32, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have done all of your requests. Let me know if there is anything else I need to do. DarklyShadows (talk) 21:52, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I have done some copyediting, but you still need to add than HNHH ref and also I have noticed MOS:QWQ issues with the Musicnotes.com ref that need fixing. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:27, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have added that to the reception area and fixed the MOS:QWQ problem. DarklyShadows (talk) 06:29, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Just remembered you still have not run Fix dead links on the article for archiving. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:30, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake ✅ DarklyShadows (talk) 06:31, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
 * It appears you forgot to do this; I am assuming good faith as you may not remember how to use the tool, done for you. ✅ on the article now, move discussion may be going on but that doesn't mean the article itself lacks stability, since no one is editing the content at all. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:16, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Shoot I thought the fix dead links was in the history section. My mistake. DarklyShadows (talk) 07:20, 3 July 2020 (UTC)