Talk:Commander (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  Adabow  (complain)  08:38, 16 July 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Is it well written?

 * Lead: link Kelly Rowland (album) to 'third studio album', otherwise someone might think self-titled links to a page about self-titling things


 * ...top ten in the UK and top twenty Ireland... in Ireland, maybe?


 * 'Music and lyrics' section: similar to his productions "Sexy Bitch" and "Boom Boom Pow". Though near the end... Starting a sentence with 'though' seems gramatically incorrect (and if not, sounds awkard). Maybe start with "However, near the end..."?


 * 'Themes' section: new section; mention Rowland's name again, rather than 'she'
 * Quote from Rap Up: "...[Kelly's] stretching her legs out and she's..". Either use "she's" (direct from quote), or "Rowland is", rather than "Kelly's"


 * 'Release' section: ..in New York that she choose this song..." maybe chose (past tense)?


 * 'Chart performance' section: '..."Commander" made it U.S. chart debut...' → made its
 * "On May 28, 2010 and After six weeks on the UK charts it peaked at number two on the dance chart[54] and nine on the official singles chart[55] a week ahead of the release of its remix EP" this is slightly confusing and probably should be reworded.


 * 'Concept and reception' section: wikify Rap Up


 * "Since official release the video has received critical acclaim with over two million Vevo views." this needs an 'as of' or similar