Talk:Commissions and Fees/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 21:48, 17 June 2012 (UTC)


 * I will do this, but it may take me a few days to get to it.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:48, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

✅ — WylieCoyote (talk) 22:44, 19 June 2012 (UTC) ✅. I always thought the caption was lengthy too. I think it was put that way to avoid image deletion (production note). — WylieCoyote (talk) 00:20, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * WP:LEAD
 * How about "twelfth and penultimate episode". --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:19, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Work on the WP:CAPTION.
 * "Roger, Don, and Pete" is confusing because Pete is standing between Roger and Don. (either explain left to right or front left to right and back). --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:23, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Do any of these characters have articles? --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:23, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Can you follow each character with the actor. I.e., Roger (John Slattery), .... --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:23, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * You also need to put Lane's actor following his name. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:40, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * (center left to right) is still confusing. Maybe (facing camera from left to right) --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:40, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * The second sentence is not necessary for a WP:CAPTION. Leave it in the text. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:41, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

✅ except for Lane's secretary name. Anyone know it? — WylieCoyote (talk) 22:44, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Plot
 * she (Christina Hendricks) looks odd. Can you rearrange to move the actor by the first mention rather than the subsequent pronoun. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:41, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Please put the actor after the first character mention (Davidtz, Pare, Hamm, etc.).--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:09, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Several still undone ( Pete, Ken, Megan, and a few more).--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:46, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Lane's secretary, character name,--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:12, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * You omitted the whole ordeal about cutting him down against police advice not to tamper with the crime scene. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:17, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * ✅, number 2. I always put the actor names after their first appearance in a scene, not first article mention, but whatever. — WylieCoyote (talk) 00:20, 21 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Production
 * This is sort of the minimal acceptable amount of production content. If you could add more, that would be good.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:24, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I added the Matthew Weiner comments to the Production section. I wish we could fine a Jared Harris picture somewhere to add there, since we don't have a good look at him above. — WylieCoyote (talk) 02:59, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

✅. There was only one. — WylieCoyote (talk) 22:44, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Critical reception
 * Please link all the notable critics. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:25, 19 June 2012 (UTC)


 * General
 * are there any relevant free images to add to the article?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Link the work in the refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:46, 19 June 2012 (UTC)


 * I am placing this on hold. Please respond to each concern on the following line. I will review this article within 7 days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:29, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * My current assessment of the article is
 * It would be good if we could add the name of Lane's Secretary.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Regarding putting names after first appearance in a scene vs. first appearance in the article, I am not a regular WP:EPISODE reviewer. If I am dragging this in the wrong direction, let me know.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Would still love more production content and some images, but this is not an issue that we need to quibble about any further. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * there remain two works that should be linked in the refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Only item 4 is a mandatory fix. I need some commentary on item 2. Other than that we can pass this puppy.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:27, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Wikilinked refs. — WylieCoyote (talk) 00:46, 23 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Great work. I am going to pass this now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:03, 23 June 2012 (UTC)