Talk:Complete communities

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Expanding
Hi everyone. Great start with the article. I am going to expand on some of the ideas that are currently presented. D.lupick (talk) 07:08, 10 November 2016 (UTC)

Page reviewer comments
Good work on the article! I fixed a couple of minor spelling and grammatical errors. Also, I find this sentence confusing "Households and communities in Canada are becoming smaller, have a different form than previous generations and are more socially and economically diverse;" ... I see that it's cited but I don't know that I would say communities are becoming smaller in general. Population is growing, but in some communities (cities) more than others (more rural areas, perhaps). In addition, the first part of the critique doesn't have a citation and, though I agree with the statement, it makes it seem like more of an opinion than a fact. Hope this helps! (Alasocha (talk) 21:17, 13 November 2016 (UTC))

I don't have many comments, but I did find something in the first sentence which could be fixed if you feel necessary. The first sentence begins: "Complete communities is an urban planning concept that aims to meet the basic needs of its citizens..." Although I can take a guess at who 'it' is, others may find it confusing. Consider changing it to something like: "...basic needs of all citizens in a community, regardless of [their] income..." The only other thing that jumped out to me is that Densification isn't very well defined. The information sort of indicates what it is not rather than what it is - which is increasing the amount of people in a given area. Otherwise looks great! I would edit the grammar, but you may be able to tell it's not my strong point! Adalley (talk) 06:53, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

Good job summarizing a complicated topic - I especially like the clear structure, moving from history to examples. Perhaps it could be strengthened by including some more on the Ahwahnee Principles, or by introducing the Ahwahnee Principles at the beginning of the article (possibly in the Lead section) because from what is said in the article, this document seems to be the (current) defining authority on complete communities. I would also be interested to hear a bit about the fact that there is only one example of a place that has been described as a 'complete community'. Well done overall. I have made a couple of minor edits to grammar and changed some sentences from the passive voice. EmilycarriganG (talk) 15:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)