Talk:Concept album/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 18:44, 22 May 2018 (UTC)

Review coming later... Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:44, 22 May 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * This article is about the topic of concept albums → I would rather say "...about the album type", but it's up to you
 * Link "critics" to Music criticism
 * no discernible consensus.[6][3] → refs need to be in numerical order
 * and subsequently popularized → and was subsequently popularized
 * but the term is more often → replacing "but" with "although" will make the sentence flow better
 * and the rock opera → "the" is superfluous here
 * many concept albums have been released across many different → replace one "many" with "several" to avoid word repetition

✅ all above --Ilovetopaint (talk) 03:24, 3 June 2018 (UTC)

Definitions
✅ all above--Ilovetopaint (talk) 17:09, 5 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Concepts are general ideas, thoughts, or abstract notions → I would add something like ",according to [AUTHOR]" (In this case being a dictionary)
 * a "concept album".[7][6] → refs need to be in numerical order
 * which ran into some of the same difficulties → which ran into similar difficulties
 * the rock album format → Maybe I'm dumb, but I don't really know what that is, and I think uninformed readers will also struggle on that. Is there a link to an article on this topic we could add? Otherwise, you will have to give a little bit of an explanation of the term
 * particular theme -- these are the → replace "--" with "—"
 * rock & rollers → Link to Rock and Roll
 * Author Jim Cullen describes it: "a collection → Author Jim Cullen describes it as "a collection

1940s–60s: Origins

 * Yes keyboardist → Please say "English band Yes keyboardist" for further context
 * composers making concept albums → I would replace "making" for "producing" or "creating"
 * Some of the themes were about exploring wild life; some were made to be played while dining or relaxing; others were more abstract and centered on emotions → Themes included exploring wild life and dealing with emotions, with some albums meant to be played while dining or relaxing.
 * Sinatra is sometimes credited → Sinatra is sometimes occasionally
 * According to biographer Will Friedwald: "Sinatra sequenced → According to biographer Will Friedwald, Sinatra "sequenced
 * ✅ all above --Ilovetopaint (talk) 03:24, 3 June 2018 (UTC)


 * variously cited as "the first concept album" → you're talking about more albums, so it should be plural
 * "variously cited as 'the first concept albums'"? That would confuse the reader to think that those albums are considered by various writers to be among the first concept albums, but the actual point is that various writers can't decide which is the first. --Ilovetopaint (talk) 17:27, 5 June 2018 (UTC)


 * favours Sgt. Pepper → Referring to an album under a shortened name could be confusing, so I would write out its full name each time
 * What other album known as "Sgt. Pepper" could the reader possibly be confused with?--Ilovetopaint (talk) 17:27, 5 June 2018 (UTC)


 * According to music critic Tim Riley → Link "music critic" to Music criticism
 * Freak Out! [June 1966] → only the release year is important here
 * There exists claims for other records → Selected observers claim for other records
 * but the fact → however the fact (better flow)
 * has been largely ignored → "ignored" is very unencyclopedic; please find another fitting word
 * (December 1965) and the Who's The Who Sell Out (December 1967) as other examples of early concept albums.[30] Brian Boyd of The Irish Times names the Kinks' Face to Face (October 1966) → we only need the years of the release; the months are superfluous
 * ✅ all above --Ilovetopaint (talk) 17:27, 5 June 2018 (UTC)

1960s–70s: Rock operas and progressive rock
✅ all above --Ilovetopaint (talk) 07:20, 3 June 2018 (UTC)
 * In 2015, Rolling Stone ranked Dark Side of the Moon number one → In 2015, Rolling Stone ranked Dark Side of the Moon at number one
 * 50 greatest prog albums → I know "prog" is shorter for "Progressive rock", but you should stick with the full name as it may confuse readers
 * Image > Genesis performing their concept album → Artists cannot perform albums, but rather material from it

1980s–present: Decline and return to popularity
✅ all above --Ilovetopaint (talk) 07:20, 3 June 2018 (UTC)
 * which valued single over album → which valued singles over albums
 * Everything else looks nice here ;)

Copy-violation

 * 34.6% is still an acceptable score!

Outcome

 * I'm putting this article for 7 days, allowing you to implement my queries above. I think the article is in quite a good shape and informs the reader on the topic's most important things. While I read through this article's past failed GA review, I think the main issues have been solved, and I do agree with you that the article should not cover every single concept album that had a bit of success, as it would easily become unfocused. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:22, 22 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Is there any news? I'm reminding you that the 7-day-period is gone, but I'm ready to give you more time if you will respond. Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:28, 2 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Sorry I completely forgot about this. I'll start going through these. --Ilovetopaint (talk) 03:24, 3 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Remember you have to still work on two sections. Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:34, 5 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Passing! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:33, 5 June 2018 (UTC)