Talk:Coney Island Cyclone/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 14:57, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

I'll take this one as well, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 14:57, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * Historic is a bit of a WP:PEACOCK word.
 * Link Astroland and Luna Park?

Early history

 * We're starting afresh so to speak with the prose from the main body so Coney Island can be linked in the first sentence here.

Area decline

 * "were also cited as contributing factors", you haven't mentioned any factors prior to this so "were all cited as..." would probably be more suitable.
 * Link eminent domain, I don't think it's a widely known term and its article shows it's known as a lot of different things around the world.
 * "was higher than the city's proposed compensation", do we know what the city offered? Would offset well with the following sentence if they managed to raise the city's offer.
 * "The proposed demolition of the Cyclone were seen as", should that be was seen as?

Preservation

 * "The refurbishment was done by Great Coasters International", was done sounds a little clunky I think. Perhaps "carried out by" or something similar perhaps?

Current use

 * "Legally, the land is owned by NYC Parks.", is legally necessary here? I'm assuming there's no question marks over the ownership.
 * Link Wonder Wheel.

Layout

 * Should the picture caption read "Seen from the west?

Track

 * "and it takes about one minute and fifty seconds", to do what? I know what you're saying but include something like "to complete one cycle of the ride" or whatever the correct terminology would be.

Notable riders and rider records

 * "On August 18–22, 1977", should this be between said dates?