Talk:Constantine Arianiti/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 14:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Criteria
GA Criteria:
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 * 1.b   ✅
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 * 2.c   ✅
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 * No DAB links   ✅ (I changed one which linked to Arianites DAB page to a redlinked [[Arianites (Byzantine family)
 * No dead links   ✅
 * No missing citations   ✅

Discussion

 * Shamà, Davide is not used by article, should be moved to further reading section. -- Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  06:03, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions
Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

 * Constantine was taken to Italy for his own safety in 1469, after the death of his father suggest removing own
 * and quickly made a successful career for himself. suggest adding he between and and quickly, else it might read that Sixtus made a career for himself.
 * Constantine may have aspired to become a leader figure seems a bit odd, suggest either leading figure or just removing figure
 * but dropped Constantine's other titles suggest changing dropped to relinquished

Background and early life

 * including the two brothers George and Thomas "the two brothers" would seem to imply relation with each other but not Constantine, suggest removing the
 * Their fathr Gjergj was an ally of Skanderbeg in the wars against the Ottomans suggest removing in the wars
 * After the death of Skanderbeg and Gjergj, both dying in 1468 suggest After the death of both Skanderbeg and Gjergj in 1468,
 * his own safety suggest removing own again.

Early career and claims

 * Constantine sought to aspire to a leadership position among the many Christian Balkan refugees in Italy superfluous, suggest removing to aspire to

Papal and German diplomat

 * Constantine's diplomatical ability impressed Julius suggest changing diplomatical to just diplomatic; unless diplomatical is more common in British English.
 * It is unclear when Constantine began to claim this title, suggest It is unclear when exactly Constantine began to claim this title,, since we have at least one time limit.

Governor of Fano

 * as part of a renewed crusading project suggest as part of planning a new crusade
 * Leo had issued crusading indulgences suggest changing crusading to just crusade
 * That is all my suggestions, passing now. -- Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  06:04, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I've implemented all your suggestions. I'm going to have to repay you for reviewing all of my stuff sometime. Ichthyovenator (talk) 07:52, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I appreciate that; although that would require me to have an article ready for GAN sometime, and with the rate of my historiography works that might be longer than my natural life. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  09:12, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The speed of your progress notwithstanding, feel free to notify me if you eventually get something to GAN and are in need of a reviewer :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 10:56, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * If you have any interest in FAC reviewing, I am currently attempting to get Featured article candidates/German destroyer Z39/archive3 passed. -- Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  18:13, 15 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm on it. Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:05, 15 September 2021 (UTC)