Talk:Construction of the Minnesota State Capitol/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mark83 (talk · contribs) 11:53, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

I will review this and get back with comments in the next few days. Mark83 (talk) 11:53, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for your review and taking the time to write out your critique. I will get to work on making changes. I appreciate the detail, it is quite helpful. This is the first time I have submitted articles for review and I have learned quite a bit. For item (2b) Do I need to site the same source paragraph by paragraph, statement by statement or just in the section? I will have to do more research to see/understand what Wikipedia's policy is on that. But I think you are correct, that is an area for improvement. On your second point in (2b), "Most of the 34 references are repetitive, the actual number of sources is very small." As for number of sources Wikipedia emphasizes the quality of citations, not their sheer quantity improves article content. Wikipedia also does recognize it is difficult to find a high amount of sources for under-represented populations such as African Americans and women, as they were simply not written about until recently, this is the same with under-represented subjects. Business and government history is well represented in academic literature, labor history is not. The subject of labor's contributions to the MN State Capitol is a new one that has only recently been studied. The sources cited are solid if not numerous.

Much of this changed starting in the 60s with historians like Edward Thompson and Howard Zinn that challenged the "Great Man" view of history and instead emphasized history from below and how the contributions of the working class contributed to history as well. The labor history in the article is as important as history of the architect Cass Gilbert. For item (3b) While it would be egregious to have individual biographical pages on each worker in Wikipedia, the grouping of small experiences of those working on the Capitol gives a better and more historical view of the labor that went into building it. There is enough notability to include them as a group on the Capitol page.

Again, thank you for your review Myotus (talk) 15:29, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
 * You're very welcome, and thank you taking my comments in the constructive way you have.
 * There isn't a hard rule on citations paragraph by paragraph, statement by statement etc. WP:CITEDENSE gives a good example;
 * For example, one inline citation is sufficient for this paragraph: Education researcher Mary Jones says that there are three kinds of students. The first group is made up of students who do their homework as soon as they receive the assignments. The second group contains students who do their homework at the last possible second. The third group is composed of students who did not realize that they were supposed to do the assignment.[1]
 * Without having reviewed the reference myself, I can't be sure. But the first paragraph of "selecting an architect" all seems so interconnected that I imagine the one reference provides verifability for the whole paragraph:
 * The Commission advertised for designs in June 1894 and had received fifty-six proposals by the fall with two prominent architects, M. Wheelwright of Boston and Henry Ives Cobb of Chicago advising the Commission on selection. In their report to the Commissioners on November 1, 1894 Wheelwright and Cobb narrowed it to what they believed were the five best, even though none of the submissions had impressed the advising architects and insisted that none were deserving of quality construction materials, such as granite or other fine stone and that limestone should be used instead. The five in order of their ranking: First - Wendell & Humphreys of Denver, Colorado; Second - J.A. Schweinfurth, of Boston, Massachusetts; Third - George R. Mann, of St. Louis, Missouri; Fourth - C. DeGersdorff, of Stockbridge, Massachusetts; Fifth - Warren B. Dunnell, of Minneapolis, Minnesota. In the end, all fifty-six submissions were rejected.
 * In contrast, these three paragraphs are all covered by one single reference at the end of the third. It's unclear if the one reference covers it all:
 * Influenced by the criticisms of the submitting architects, the Commission requested that the legislature change some of the conditions laid down on the contracts. The burdensome design restrictions, insufficient funding amounts, and the architect's limited control of the project would undermine the final product. The legislature passed the recommended changes. On April 15, 1895, the Commission announced another competition and received forty-one submitted designs. Wheelwright helped the commission judge the entries and recommended five submissions for premiums, George R. Mann of St. Louis, Missouri, Wendell & Humphreys of Denver, Colorado; Bassford, Traphagen & Fitzpatrick of St. Paul and Duluth, Minnesota; Cass Gilbert of St. Paul, Minnesota; and Clarence H. Johnston of St. Paul, Minnesota.


 * The Commission began deliberations and on October 30, 1895. and made following awards: First - Cass Gilbert of St. Paul, Minnesota; Second - George Mann, St. Louis, Missouri; Third - Bassford, Traphagen & Fitzpatrick, Duluth, Minnesota; Fourth - Clarence H. Johnston, of St. Paul, Minnesota; and Fifth - Harry W. Jones of Minneapolis, Minnesota, With that Cass Gilbert was awarded the Commission. Gilbert had not entered the first round, believing that the compensation for the winner was too paltry.


 * The Denver architectural firm of Wendell & Humphreys complained that "politics" had influenced the awards. The Commission at its December 17 meeting decided that "the letter of Mess. Wendell & Humphries [sic) be returned to them by the Vice President, with the statement that the Board considers their insinuation that local politics influenced the award of premiums, were uncalled for and that the Board does not care to file such communications." In its second report, the Commission felt the need to notice these accusations, for it asserted that the selection was following the opinion of Wheelwright.
 * Your comment "As for number of sources Wikipedia emphasizes the quality of citations, not their sheer quantity improves article content." is a fair challenge, as is your further elaboration on this point. I'll update the review table to reflect this.
 * On reviewing the "Workers killed and injured during State Capitol construction" section again as a result, my only other comment is to review the number of short sentences, try to make it more cohesive prose where possible. Mark83 (talk) 19:57, 14 January 2022 (UTC) & edited Mark83 (talk) 20:13, 14 January 2022 (UTC)