Talk:Cool Girl/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 21:59, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Fine

Lead

 * The track was released for digital download on → The track was released for digital download and stream (see below)
 * The song is a downtempo electropop work with elements of techno and house music. → The song is a downtempo electropop work with elements of techno and house music, whily lirically addressed the themes about casual and commitment-free relationships.
 * The track was inspired by the "Cool Girl" monologue by character Amy Elliott-Dunne in the 2014 feature film Gone Girl. → last sentence of the second paragraph
 * According to the singer → However, according to the singer
 * Critics had diverse opinions about the meaning of the track, with some of them noting themes about casual and commitment-free relationships. "Cool Girl" received positive reviews from critics, who commended its production and lyrical themes. → "Cool Girl" received positive reviews from critics, who commended its production and lyrical themes. (the rest is above)
 * I have issues with those comments above; the paragraph was structured to showcase a) the elements of the track b) the inspiration behind the lyrics, which would lead us to c) the opinion of the singer herself about the lyrics versus d) the opinion of the critics about the lyrics, which you can note are different.
 * You can merge the comment of the critics once they give their opinion. Otherwise critics are in every paragraph. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:03, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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 * It received sales certifications in these countries as well as in France, Germany, Poland and the United Kingdom → mention some of the certifications
 * The music video and peformances can be in the last paragraph
 * Sweden's Idol 2016 → Sweden's Idol (I already know the date)
 * Idol 2016 → Idol (was it performed in another Idol show?)

Background and development
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 * Queen of the Clouds tour → year the tour ran between brackets
 * The Struts. They ask her if she wanted to write lyrics to it → The Struts and asked her if she wanted to write lyrics to it
 * They reunited later in Stockholm in early 2016 and finished the song → In early 2016, they reunited in Stockholm to finish the song.

Release

 * It was made available for digital download on 4 August 2016 → It was made available for digital download and stream on 4 August 2016 (look at the Billboard source)
 * as the lead single from the artist's second studio album, Lady Wood (2016).[9][10] → two sources saying the same thing? Remove the headline one.
 * 23 August 2016,[11] → source at the end of the sentence
 * It is to make the setence less clunky. If anyone has doubts can see so at the end of the sentence the confirmation on the source. This answers both questions, 3 sources at the end of a setence is more than enough. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:38, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

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Composition and inspiration

 * No need for the image of the actress we already know what is in the caption
 * Its instrumentation incorporates a deep synthesizer bass line. → website portion of Idolator shouldn't be shown, remove the performance source from here
 * Why do you have a publisher in the Spin magazine? No other source has publisher if it has work, please remove. You forgot a bracket in the pitchfork source
 * The song's main lyrical theme was inspired by the "Cool girl" monologue spoken by character Amy Elliott-Dunne, portrayed by Rosamund Pike, in the feature film Gone Girl (2014). During that scene, Elliott-Dunne says, "He loved a girl who doesn't exist. A girl I was pretending to be. The Cool Girl". The singer stated the monologue moved her because it showcased the way people tend to change themselves for somebody else → most fo this is alrady above, summarize it. Above where? the lead? --Paparazzzi (talk) 05:32, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No, in the Background and development "She had recently watched the film Gone Girl (2014), and began to analyze a monologue by the character portrayed by Rosamund Pike talking about being a "cool girl".[1][2] Lo added, "I just remember this monologue that she has in the movie where she says she's changed a lot things [sic] about herself to become someone that she thought her husband would want."[2] Inspired by the monologue, she wrote the melody, chorus and pre-chorus with sarcastic lyrics and sent the track back to The Struts. In early 2016, they reunited in Stockholm to finish the song". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:05, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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Lyrics and meaning
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 * Alim Kheraj of DIY → Alim Kheraj from DIY
 * Amy Mackelden of Bustle → Bustle's Amy Mackelden

Critical reception
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 * Kyann-Sian Williams of NME → Kyann-Sian Williams from NME
 * Madison Vain of Entertainment Weekly → Entertainment Weekly's Madison Vain
 * Beth Bowles of Exclaim! → Beth Bowles from Exclaim!
 * Adam R. Holz of Plugged In → unreliable see below

Commercial performance
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 * "Habits (Stay High)" and "Talking Body". → years of release in between brackets
 * acharts is not a reliable source, use the billboard one.
 * If it charted on the Canadian Hot 100, then the Canadian Digital Song Sales is just a component chart, remove it.
 * The following week, it peaked at number 15. It spent sixteen weeks on the chart, and → The following week, it peaked at number 15, spending a total of sixteen weeks on the chart. It
 * Swedish Recording Industry Association → Swedish Recording Industry Association (GLF), do similiar to the others.
 * to ear → to earn
 * Remove the auspop source from "It later reached the number 30 position"
 * Do the same for the following auspop source, you don't need two sources saying the same.
 * Silver, Platium, Gold → no capital letters
 * Thet text is quite clunky with the sources, which makes it hard to read, try to put them at the end of the sentences.

Background and release

 * The film, co-written by Lo and Erem...who plays Lo's "self-destructive alter ego" → this is good information for the album, not for the single, let's focus on the music video for the song. The mention above is more than enough as the song is part of it. ❌
 * the music video is part of the whole film, and background information about the film also can apply here.--Paparazzzi (talk) 18:14, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I was not aware of that, make sure you said that, make it more clear. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:30, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

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Synopsis and reception

 * Fine

Live performances

 * Fine

Credits and personnel

 * Two collums would be enough
 * Use so there is the right space between the credits and the personnel.  that's the. Copy the template and replace it for the "-". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:32, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Engineering – John Hanes → John Hanes - mix engineer
 * First the names, then the credits. You have it the other way around ❌ why is this a problem?--Paparazzzi (talk) 18:19, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * See the guidelines: WikiProject_Albums/Album_article_style_advice. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:29, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you. --Paparazzzi (talk) 18:35, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

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Weekly charts

 * Fine

Year-end charts

 * Fine

Certifications

 * Fine

Release history

 * Fine

Overall

 * You can now address the issues. Let me know once you are done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:13, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I have addressed all of your comments. Thank you for reviewing the article and tell me if something else is needed. Regards, --Paparazzzi (talk) 18:43, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I left the answer for the questions and what you have not done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:19, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I have addressed all of your comments, including those who don't have a ✅ template next to them. I left another comment above however. Regards, --Paparazzzi (talk) 20:08, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm making changes to the article, small ones see if you are ok with those.
 * Small changes? You changed a lot about the article. You removed the aCharts source when I had already told you that it is a reliable source, you removed the Year-end Australian Streaming Chart even if the song did not chart on the Year-end Australian Singles Chart. You basically removed all of my comments on this discussion and modified the article to your like. What is this? --Paparazzzi (talk) 00:05, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It is not a reliable source. You can use the Hot 100 source it gives you the same information. You said you did everything even those that didn't a had a done. You did zero on the commercial section. It charted on the australian regular charts. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:10, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I basically included the wikilink in my comment, but since you removed my comments, I'm going to include it here again: WP:GOODCHARTS. Look at the aCharts column for the US row. It can be used. And I actually made changes to the commercial section, don't say I didn't. Paparazzzi (talk) 00:20, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Those changes regarding acharts are recent, I was not aware of that, my apologies. You did half of what I asked and not in the right way, most of those. I re-added the Year-end chart. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:25, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think I have the right to argue when I feel a comment is not right (if that's what you meant with me doing half of what I asked and not in the right way). I addressed all of your comments, I let you know which ones I did not made and why, while I completed the other ones. I hope that's clear. There's still the comment about the publisher vs work issue above... Paparazzzi (talk) 00:35, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Of course. You didn't explained that on the "commercial performance" section. You changed them. I explained it to you. It is done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 00:42, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What else needs to be done? Regards, Paparazzzi (talk) 01:12, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Nothing else as far as I'm concerned, do you want to change anything? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:21, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No, everything is fine. Regards, --Paparazzzi (talk) 13:18, 18 April 2020 (UTC)