Talk:Cool Hand Peter/GA1

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Reviewer: MayhemMario (talk · contribs) 12:34, 18 December 2011 (UTC)

- Me again! I hope this one goes better! :) Mayhem  Mario  12:34, 18 December 2011 (UTC)

Lead
Quite a lot of things need changing.

Original
"Cool Hand Peter" is the eighth episode of the tenth season of the animated comedy series Family Guy. The episode originally aired on Fox in the United States on December 4, 2011. The episode follows Peter Griffin, along with his friends Joe, Quagmire and Cleveland, who has returned to Quahog, Rhode Island from Stoolbend, Virginia, when they decide to go on a road trip to New Orleans, Louisiana. While driving through the deep south, however, they are suddenly stopped by a police officer, and arrested and thrown in jail when the sheriff abuses his power, and plants marijuana in their car. The group must then attempt to escape the prison when their stay is extended indefinitely, and return to Quahog where they will be able to go free with the help of Joe and the local police force.

Proposed
"Cool Hand Peter" is the eighth episode of the tenth season of the animated comedy series Family Guy. The episode originally aired on Fox in the United States on December 4, 2011. The episode follows Peter Griffin, along with his friends Joe, Quagmire and Cleveland, who has returned to Quahog and decide to go on a road trip to New Orleans, Louisiana. Whilst driving they are stopped by a police officer, arrested and thrown in jail by the sheriff who abuses his power, and plants marijuana in their car. The group then attempt to escape the prison due to their stay being extended indefinitely, and return to Quahog.

2nd
When you say (last sentence), "and included cameo appearances by several of The Cleveland Show's main characters." I think it onyl included one, am I right? (Donna Tubbs), if so, make 'several', 'one'.
 * Both Cleveland and Donna were featured in the episode. Gage (talk) 06:30, 22 December 2011 (UTC)

"and included cameo appearances by two of The Cleveland Show's main characters." Mayhem Mario  13:50, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Gage (talk) 14:10, 22 December 2011 (UTC)

Original
It received mostly mixed-to-negative reviews from critics for its storyline, and many cultural references. According to Nielsen ratings, it was viewed in 7.14 million homes in its original airing. The episode featured guest performances by Ralph Garman, Bob Gunton, Sanaa Lathan, Julius Sharpe, and Jennifer Tilly, along with several recurring guest voice actors for the series. It was first announced at the 2011 San Diego Comic-Con International.

Proposed
First announced at the 2011 San Diego Comic-Con International, the episode was written by Artie Johann and Shawn Ries, and directed by Brian Iles. It received mostly negative reviews from critics for its storyline and for it not living up to the 1967 drama film Cool Hand Luke, which the episode was named after. According to Nielsen ratings, it was watched by 7.14 million people in its original airing. The episode featured guest performances by Ralph Garman, Bob Gunton, Sanaa Lathan, Julius Sharpe, and Jennifer Tilly, along with several recurring guest voice actors from the series.

Original
When former Griffin family neighbor Cleveland Brown returns to Quahog for a week, he visits his old friends Peter, Joe and Quagmire at the local bar. When Peter gets tired of his wife, Lois, constantly demanding for him to do chores, the group decides to take a road trip to New Orleans, Louisiana. Left to their devices, Lois, Bonnie and Donna proceed to enjoy "girl time", resulting with them doing wine-induced childish antics which include forcibly dressing Brian in a humiliating bumblebee costume.

While driving through a rural area in Georgia, Peter and his group are pulled over by the local sheriff, and Peter makes every effort to talk as annoyingly and rudely to him as possible. But the Sheriff is more offended by Cleveland's attempt to calmingly explain themselves, punching out one of their headlights and then planting a bag of marijuana in their trunk. The group are then sent to a county work camp where they are forced to perform various tasks, including ditch digging and rock crushing. As their stay in the jail supposedly comes to an end, the warden then approaches them and tells them that their stay has been extended an additional thirty days. Learning from another prisoner that they might be locked up forever, the group decides to break out of the prison when the prison guards's eyes are diverted. Successful in their attempt, they soon come across a house where they discover a set of handcuff and shackle keys. They then discover that they are in the county sheriff's home, who returns soon after. Peter tries to pretend to be his wife while hiding in a closet, and he convinces the sheriff to let the fugitives go free. This exchange ends with the sheriff asking for a hug, which makes Peter jump out of the closet and reveal the group. The entire police force then comes after them, until they are able to jump on a train and arrive in Quahog, only to be met by the sheriff and his deputies. Joe, however, had called ahead and arranged for the Quahog police department to arrive and rescue them. Joe then smashes the sheriff's vehicle, shoots him in the leg, and demands he leave Quahog.

Proposed
When Cleveland Brown returns to Quahog for a week, he visits his old friends Peter, Joe and Quagmire. When Peter gets tired of his wife, Lois, constantly demanding for him to do chores so the group decides to take a road trip to New Orleans, Louisiana. Whilst their husbands are away, Lois, Bonnie and Donna proceed to enjoy "girl time", resulting with them doing wine-induced childish antics which include forcibly dressing Brian in a humiliating bumblebee costume.

While driving through a rural area in Georgia, Peter and his group are pulled over by the local sheriff, and Peter makes every effort to talk as annoyingly and rudely to him as possible. But the Sheriff is more offended by Cleveland's attempt to calmingly explain themselves, punching out one of their headlights and then planting a bag of marijuana in their trunk. The group are then sent to a county work camp where they are forced to perform various tasks, including ditch digging and rock crushing. As their stay in the jail supposedly comes to an end, the warden then approaches them and tells them that their stay has been extended an additional thirty days. Learning from another prisoner that they might be locked up forever, the group decides to break out of the prison when the prison guards's eyes are diverted. Successful in their attempt, they soon come across a house where they discover a set of handcuff and shackle keys.

They then discover that they are in the sheriff's home, who returns soon after. Peter tries to pretend to be his wife while hiding in a closet, and he convinces the sheriff to let the fugitives go free. This exchange ends with the sheriff asking for a hug, which makes Peter jump out of the closet and reveal the group. The entire police force then comes after them, until they are able to jump on a train and arrive in Quahog, only to be met by the sheriff and his deputies. Joe, however, had called ahead and arranged for the Quahog police department to arrive and rescue them. Joe then smashes the sheriff's vehicle, shoots him in the leg, and demands he leave Quahog.

- Not much has changed, minor.

Original
The episode was directed by series regular Brian Iles, shortly after the conclusion of the ninth production season, in his second episode of the season,[1] the first being "Seahorse Seashell Party". Iles joined the series in its fifth season, directing the episode "Boys Do Cry".[2] The episode was written by Artie Johann and Shawn Ries,[1] in their first episode of the series. Series regulars Peter Shin and James Purdum served as supervising directors, with Andrew Goldberg, Alex Carter, Spencer Porter, Anthony Blasucci, Mike Desilets, and Deepak Sethi serving as staff writers for the episode.[1] Composer Walter Murphy, who has worked on the series since its inception, returned to compose the music for "Cool Hand Peter".[1] The episode saw the re-appearance by former main cast member Mike Henry as the voice of Cleveland Brown. The actor had previously left the role on Family Guy, in order to star as the character in his own spinoff, entitled The Cleveland Show, which was co-created by Henry, along with Family Guy creator and executive producer Seth MacFarlane, and writer Richard Appel.[3] Sanaa Lathan, who portrays Donna Tubbs on The Cleveland Show, also guest starred as her character in the episode.[1] "Cool Hand Peter" was first announced at the 2011 San Diego Comic-Con International on July 23, 2011 by series showrunners and executive producers Steve Callaghan and Mark Hentemann.[4]

In addition to the regular cast and Lathan, voice actor Ralph Garman, actor Bob Gunton, voice actor Julius Sharpe, and actress Jennifer Tilly, who portrayed the sheriff, warden, UPS Guy and Bonnie Swanson, respectively, guest starred in the episode.[5] Recurring guest voice actors Danny Smith, writer Alec Sulkin and writer John Viener made minor appearances throughout the episode.[1] Recurring guest cast members Adam West, and Patrick Warburton also appeared in the episode, portraying the characters of Adam West and Joe Swanson, respectively.[1]

Proposed
The episode was directed by series regular Brian Iles and written by Artie Johann and Shawn Ries,[1] in their first episode of the series. Series regulars Peter Shin and James Purdum served as supervising directors, with Andrew Goldberg, Alex Carter, Spencer Porter, Anthony Blasucci, Mike Desilets, and Deepak Sethi serving as staff writers for the episode.[1] Composer Walter Murphy, who has worked on the series since its inception, returned to compose the music for the episode.[1] The episode saw the re-appearance of former main cast member Mike Henry as the voice of Cleveland Brown. The actor had previously left the role on Family Guy, in order to star as the character in his own spinoff, entitled The Cleveland Show, which was co-created by Henry. Sanaa Lathan, who portrays Donna Tubbs on The Cleveland Show, also guest starred as her character in the episode.[1] "Cool Hand Peter" was first announced at the 2011 San Diego Comic-Con International on July 23, 2011 by series showrunners and executive producers Steve Callaghan and Mark Hentemann.[4]

In addition to the regular cast and Lathan, voice actor Ralph Garman, actor Bob Gunton, voice actor Julius Sharpe, and actress Jennifer Tilly, who portrayed the sheriff, warden, UPS Guy and Bonnie Swanson, respectively, guest starred in the episode.[5] Recurring guest voice actors Danny Smith, writer Alec Sulkin and writer John Viener made minor appearances throughout the episode.[1] Recurring cast members Adam West, and Patrick Warburton also appeared in the episode, portraying the characters of Adam West and Joe Swanson, respectively.[1]

- Quite a lot of references have gone, but the information was not relevant. If the reader wants to read more on for instance the Cleveland show, they can click on the link right?

Original
The title of the episode is a reference to the 1967 American prison drama film Cool Hand Luke, starring actor Paul Newman.[6] In the opening scene of the episode, while Peter, Joe, Cleveland and Quagmire are drinking at the local bar, Peter's wife, Lois, suddenly calls him on his cell phone. The theme song for Family Guy creator and executive producer Seth MacFarlane's spin-off series The Cleveland Show then begins playing as Peter's ringtone.[6] While the group drives to New Orleans, they attempt to pass the time by playing various games in the car. One of the games involves deciding whether to be a "hobo," or former German Nazi leader Adolf Hitler.[6] After the group is pulled over by the sheriff, and arrested for drug possession, they are all taken to court, where the jury is revealed to be various characters from the Fox animation series The Simpsons,[6][7] created by Matt Groening.[8] After the group escapes from jail, Peter remarks that he is filled with hunger, and would like to stop at a "Burger Queen" or "McDaniels" along the way back to Quahog, a reference to the American fast food restaurants Burger King and McDonalds,[6] as indicated by Quagmire.[1]

Proposed
The title of the episode is a reference to the 1967 American film Cool Hand Luke.[6] In the opening scene of the episode, while Peter, Joe, Cleveland and Quagmire are drinking at the local bar, Peter's wife, Lois, calls him on his phone. The theme song from The Cleveland Show then begins playing as Peter's ringtone.[6] While the group drives to New Orleans, they attempt to pass the time by playing various games in the car. One of the games involves deciding whether to be a "hobo," or former German Nazi leader Adolf Hitler.[6] After the group is pulled over by the sheriff, and arrested for drug possession, they are all taken to court, where the jury is revealed to be various characters from the Fox animation series The Simpsons.[6][7] After the group escapes from jail, Peter remarks that he is filled with hunger, and would like to stop at a "Burger Queen" or "McDaniels" along the way back to Quahog, a reference to the American fast food restaurants Burger King and McDonalds,[6] as indicated by Quagmire.[1]

Original
"Cool Hand Peter" was broadcast on December 4, 2011, as a part of an animated television night on Fox, and was preceded by The Simpsons and Allen Gregory, and followed by Family Guy creator and executive producer Seth MacFarlane's spin-off series, The Cleveland Show. It was watched by 7.14 million viewers, according to Nielsen ratings, despite airing simultaneously with the Desperate Housewives on ABC, The Good Wife on CBS and Sunday Night Football on NBC. The episode also acquired a 3.6/8 rating in the 18–49 demographic, beating Allen Gregory and The Cleveland Show, in addition to significantly edging out both shows in total viewership.[9] The episode's ratings increased significantly from the previous week's episode, "Amish Guy".[10]

Reviews of the episode were mostly mixed to negative, calling the storyline "disappointing."[6] Kevin McFarland of The A.V. Club wrote of the episode, "At this juncture, disappointment is an expectation, something I have to fight against whenever I sit down to watch the show in an attempt to give each episode a fair shake."[6] He continued, "This week, I was at a bit of a loss, because despite a return to an older, more successful formula, with a clearly plotted path, Family Guy didn’t muster up enough material to fill out the A-plot of a half hour."[6] McFarland also stated that the episode did not live up to the 1967 drama film Cool Hand Luke, that the title of the episode was named after.[6] He concluded his review of the episode by giving the episode a grade of C.[6] Terren R. Moore of Ology also found the episode to be unimpressive, noting, "It's good fun while it's on, but nothing here really sticks or adds to anything new to love about Family Guy."[11] Moore also commented, "it's a pretty weak episode of Family Guy, where the most memorable joke of the night involves a thought bubble where Quagmire pulls a string of beads out of a woman's vagina."[11] In the conclusion of the review, Moore gave the episode a score of six out of ten.[11]

Proposed
"Cool Hand Peter" was broadcast on December 4, 2011. It was watched by 7.14 million viewers, according to Nielsen ratings, despite airing simultaneously with the Desperate Housewives on ABC, The Good Wife on CBS and Sunday Night Football on NBC. The episode also acquired a 3.6/8 rating in the 18–49 demographic, beating Allen Gregory and The Cleveland Show, in addition to significantly edging out both shows in total viewership.[9] The episode's ratings increased significantly from the previous week's episode, "Amish Guy".[10]

Reviews of the episode were mostly negative, Kevin McFarland of The A.V. Club calling the storyline "disappointing."[6] He wrote of the episode, "At this juncture, disappointment is an expectation, something I have to fight against whenever I sit down to watch the show in an attempt to give each episode a fair shake."[6] He continued, "This week, I was at a bit of a loss, because despite a return to an older, more successful formula, with a clearly plotted path, Family Guy didn’t muster up enough material to fill out the A-plot of a half hour."[6] McFarland also stated that the episode did not live up to the 1967 drama film Cool Hand Luke, that the title of the episode was named after.[6] He concluded his review of the episode by giving the episode a grade of C.[6] Terren R. Moore of Ology also found the episode to be unimpressive, noting, "It's good fun while it's on, but nothing here really sticks or adds to anything new to love about Family Guy."[11] Moore also commented, "it's a pretty weak episode of Family Guy, where the most memorable joke of the night involves a thought bubble where Quagmire pulls a string of beads out of a woman's vagina."[11] In the conclusion of the review, Moore gave the episode a score of six out of ten.[11]

- Note are you getting the full amount of information out of these sources, im not sure you are.
 * Please indicate what should be added. It looks perfectly fine to me. Gage (talk) 05:58, 22 December 2011 (UTC)


 * The AV Club refrence, has much much more to give. Go to the section 'Stray observations', there is a lot there. Mayhem  Mario  13:52, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Most, if not all, of that seems very trivial, and I do not see how or why it should be incoroporated into the article. Gage (talk) 14:10, 22 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, thats up to you, right, its got 9 references this article. But im going to pass it. Passed. Mayhem  Mario  14:31, 22 December 2011 (UTC)

Anyway for now, that's all im doing untill further fixes are made, 7 days on hold. Mayhem Mario  20:21, 19 December 2011 (UTC) Im going to extend the duration, so all finished by 31 December 2011 rather than 26? Mayhem Mario  20:26, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Your concerns have been addressed. Gage (talk) 05:58, 22 December 2011 (UTC)