Talk:Cooperman Barnabas Medical Center

July 2009
I rewrote to address a concern that one reader indicated that it is more like an advertisement. I have removed words that are potential offenders. Please note the article already included criticism about this institution to maintain neutral viewpoint which does not exist in most of articles about hospital. Therefore, I think the current version is fair enough not to be viewed as an advertisement. Please address the specific concerns in this page if there is still a need to improve so that it gives me the direction on how to improve it. Thank you. Z22 (talk) 01:19, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * The peacock terms are gone. If I didn't think the article had merit, it would have been flagged as spam, and if I had more time, I would have rewritten it myself. I still get a bit of a promotional vibe, but I may be biased having read the prior version. I'm not about to reflag it or attempt to edit it, for now. At some point, when it's not fresh in my mind, on a day when I'm in a highly benevolent mood and have no worries about time, I'll give it another look. With luck, someone will chime in before then. An extra set of eyes rarely does harm.Novangelis (talk) 02:24, 19 July 2009 (UTC)