Talk:Corbin Building/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 05:09, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello. I will have the review in a day or two. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 05:09, 4 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for taking up the review. Did you have any comments? epicgenius (talk) 16:14, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I am sorry for the delay . I will be done by tomorrow. Best. — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:28, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Design

 * "supposedly the first structure to use such technology" — In the US or the world? Or the state?

Facade

 * "The building has facades on Broadway and John Street, with one bay on Broadway and eight on John Street." — To avoid repetition, could this be more concise? → "The building has facades with one bay on Broadway and eight on John Street." or "The building has facades on Broadway and John Street, with one bay on the former and eight on the latter."
 * ✅ I went with another option, "The building's facade contains one bay on Broadway and eight on John Street." epicgenius (talk) 16:07, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

History

 * "John Haberdinck" — Mention his profession at the end if that information is available. It will give some context since he does not have an article here.

Construction and early use

 * "Corbin's company, the Corbin Banking Company," — A little redundant since it is already mentioned above in "which would house his banking firm". Perhaps remove "Corbin's company"?

Renovation

 * "destroyed or severely damaged during the September 11, 2001, attacks," — Could this be written as it is in its Wikipedia article "destroyed or severely damaged during the September 11 attacks," as the commas are somewhat awkward. I don't believe the year is needed as it is a widely recognized event.
 * I have moved the year somewhere else because it is important in establishing why these transit improvements were made in the 2000s and 2010s. epicgenius (talk) 16:07, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "took up space" — Can it be more specific instead? If they rented or leased it out?

Critical reception

 * Link — "Roman aqueduct", "French Renaissance"
 * "fifth edition of the AIA Guide to New York City (published in 2010)" → "fifth edition of the AIA Guide to New York City (2010)" — Since "fifth edition" is mentioned previously, don't have to specify with "published in".
 * "The AIA Guide described the upper-story arches" — Minor point but I would avoid using "The AIA Guide" again in the sentence right after the one in which its name was used. Perhaps "They", "The guide", "The book" or "The catalogue" would work.

Final

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The article is written nicely and has a great flow. It meets the criteria. Thank you for your work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:39, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The article is written nicely and has a great flow. It meets the criteria. Thank you for your work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:39, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The article is written nicely and has a great flow. It meets the criteria. Thank you for your work! — <b style="color:#000000">The Most Comfortable</b> <b style="color:#4B0082">Chair</b> 16:39, 11 October 2020 (UTC)