Talk:Corey Taylor/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 15:09, 22 July 2010 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay on the review. First, I went through the images, and checked on the three non-free ones. I'm actually not seeing a reason to keep any of them. Why is a pic of his house needed? Why are either of the two audio clips needed in his article? For bios I generally shy away from any audio clips unless they show something particularly important. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:09, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Well for the house, the purpose is to show how he depicts his old house. That most likely gives a better view of what it actually looked like, compared to what he says about it. The music samples explain the difference between his projects Slipknot (band) and Stone Sour, one obviously being softer than the other. Crowz  RSA  19:43, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Makes sense, though I feel that the change in style can be explained in the prose, and as such the audio clips would not be needed. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 19:22, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * So you are implying I remove both audio samples and explain something about the house in the prose.?... Crowz  RSA  23:27, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Mostly, yes. The differences in musical styles can be adequately explained without the audio. The house picture and prose is fine for now at least. (I'll finally do a full review and read through tomorrow so I can answer that fully then; sorry for the delay so far, the backlog at GAN compeletely burned me out) Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 03:33, 4 August 2010 (UTC)

I'll do this in sections per the burnout above so i don't overwhelm myself. Article's not too long at least.


 * Lead:
 * "Taylor had dealt with alcohol abuse and attempted suicide" That and can be removed since there's one later in the sentence.
 * Done


 * "In Slipknot, many of his lyrics contain explicit content." Doesn't seem necessary for the lead. Instead, replace with perhaps some additional band stuff since not much is in the lead.
 * Done


 * Personal life:
 * "When Taylor was eighteen, he left his grandmother's trailer and went to various places, Des Moines, being a place he commonly went back to" last comma not needed, unless there's a phrase missing or something.
 * Done


 * "On November 14, 2003, Taylor attempted to jump off a balcony of the eighth floor of the Hyatt on Sunset Boulevard. This was when Scarlett stopped him." Can be combined into one sentence.
 * Done


 * "K! Services to Metal award on behalf of Paul Gray who died." How did he die? Maybe not entirely relevant but it's better than just stopping there.
 * Done


 * Music career:
 * "leaving the electric guitar position open." So, did they make their first album(s) without an electric guitar? That's what it sounds like as written, if not reword.
 * Done — reworded


 * "Both Taylor and guitarist Jim Root contacted both Josh Rand, Stone Sour's guitarist," second both not needed
 * Done


 * "approached him asking him to join." asking him to join Slipknot.
 * Done


 * "received a 2× Platinum" went 2x platinum
 * Done


 * Discography and other sections:
 * No problems here
 * Misc:
 * I wouldn't use IMDb as a reliable source for biographical info, since that stuff is user-created. (filmographies etc. would be fine but that's not relevant in this case)
 * I removed the one source that was about him solely, but are the ones verifying stuff in the discography and filmography sections fine?
 * Those are fine, yes. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear


 * The following sources are not reliable and should be replaced: NNDB (#13)
 * Done


 * The following sources are bare URLs and need publishers, dates, etc. added: wedding (#16), welsh music (#128, needs date/accessdate)
 * Done

This is now everything that I've found. I'll place the article on hold and can finally pass this when this is all addressed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:29, 8 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 17:45, 10 August 2010 (UTC)