Talk:Cosmology of Tolkien's legendarium/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)


 * Will get to this tomorrow (or rather, in a few hours UTC-wise).  𓃦 LunaEatsTuna  (💬) 04:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Many thanks as always. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:13, 4 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work on the changes! I can now confidently pass this article for GA status. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 14:54, 6 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go.
 * Noted.

Files
All images are relevant, of acceptable quality, and copyright-free:
 * : CC-BY-SA 3.0;
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 * : CC-BY-SA 3.0.
 * Noted.

Prose

 * "When Men try to go there" – wikilink Men in Middle-earth.
 * Done.


 * "including the world, Arda and its central continent," – I believe it should be "including the world, Arda, and its central continent,"?
 * Done.


 * Could the quote box be cited?
 * Done.


 * "The race of the Dwarves" – wikilink Dwarves in Middle-earth.
 * Done.


 * "These were co-actors" – is there a better word choice available than "co-actors"?
 * Reworded.


 * Wikilink Christopher Tolkien and unlink his mention in § Planets and constellations.
 * Done.


 * "during the Music of the Ainur" – this should not be wikilinked as it redirects to Ainulindalë which has already been wikilinked.
 * Done.


 * "give them immortality." – I think it makes sense to wikilink immortality here.
 * Done.


 * "are destined to "fade" much more rapidly," – recommend "are destined to "fade" more rapidly,"
 * Done.


 * "may ultimately go to Heaven" – could Heaven in Middle-earth be expanded upon?
 * This is Shippey's thought; Tolkien does not expand upon it (beyond saying the Elves don't know about it).


 * "though this is left vague in the Legendarium." – does "Legendarium" have to be capitalised?
 * No.


 * "So, Shippey asks, did Elves have souls? Since they could not leave the world, the answer seems to be no; but given that they didn't disappear completely on death, the answer had to have been yes." – is quite unencyclopaedic. Rephrase.
 * Reworded.


 * "as various scholars have commented" – are there too many to name individually?
 * Multiple scholars have said very similar things; listing their names won't help the average reader, and for the rare one who needs to know, the citations are right there.


 * Does "Elves ("functionally immortal")" need to be cited individually? Ref 7 is already cited in Hierarchy of beings.
 * Well, if the rule is "we always cite direct quotations" then yes. And it'd be unsafe to remove the quotation marks.


 * "Roman Catholicism, and that of Medieval poetry" – wikilink Roman Catholicism as first mention in the lead.
 * Done.


 * "that Good and Evil are equally powerful" – are these capitalisations correct?
 * Let's try it without.


 * "Avakúma is not to be confused with the state of non-being that preceded the creation of Eä." – Avakúma? This is its only mention.
 * Avoided.


 * I doubt that "Ages of the Stars" and "Great Stars" need to be boldfaced.
 * Fixed.


 * "Tolkien created Sindarin names for the other" – wikilink Sindarin.
 * Done.

Refs
All sources are RS. Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 1, 5, 8, 18, 23 or 29.


 * Ref 25 has a strangely formatted archive URL parameter(s).
 * Fixed.

Other

 * Short desc, See also, navs, other templates and cats good.
 * Noted.


 * Could WP:ALT text be added at all?
 * Added.