Talk:Cottage Road Cinema/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:20, 16 August 2019 (UTC)

Comments nice neat article, almost already beyond GA standard, so my comments should be taken in the spirit with which they're intended! Trivial issues, I'll put the nom on hold while we discuss these. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:49, 18 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Seldom say this, but I think the lead para is a bit too big on its own. Perhaps split in two?
 * "newsreel cameraman" is a WP:SEAOFBLUE.
 * "Leeds Civic Trust blue plaque " likewise.
 * "being sold during" the point here being actually sold in the auditorium itself rather than the foyer which is commonplace now throughout major cinema chains?
 * Consider Category:1912 establishments in England?
 * Not sure there's a need for a link for motoring at all.
 * You could easily link Headingley in the lead.
 * "Charles Morris told the Yorkshire Evening Post that " newspaper titles in italics.
 * " sold-out showing of the James Bond film Casino Royale as " perhaps worth emphasising this was the 2006 version.
 * " Labour MP Gerald Kaufman" triple sea of blue.
 * "and families - according to " en-dash, not hyphen.
 * "offer an un-obstructed view " do you mean unobstructed by other patrons? (plus, I wouldn't hyphenate unobstructed here).
 * ""Owen Brooks (1863-1947)," en-dash in that year range.
 * "About - Auditorium:" en dash again.
 * Thanks for the review. I agree with most of your suggestions and have made changes as a result. I see what you mean about the link for motoring, but I included, as 1905 was so long ago that I didn't want there to be any chance of misunderstanding by the reader ("did they have cars in 1905?"). Happy for you to remove though if you think I'm being too cautious. I also see what you mean about 'sea of blue', but I think the links are required and unfortunately there aren't better links e.g. a specific page for Leeds Civic Trust blue plaques. Cavie78 (talk) 20:40, 18 August 2019 (UTC)
 * I'm okay with the changes, I'd prefer not to see the seas of blue, particularly "newsreel cameraman" and " Labour MP Gerald Kaufman" (a triple), rewording to avoid these should be considered, but there's nothing in the basic GAN criteria preventing this from being promoted. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:40, 19 August 2019 (UTC)