Talk:Courage C60/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 21:44, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

I'll give this a review; it's been waiting long enough. Wizardman 21:44, 28 May 2015 (UTC)

- any progress on this? :) Luke no 94  (tell Luke off here) 13:23, 5 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I'll knock this out either tonight or Sunday. Alas been busy this week. Wizardman  22:40, 5 June 2015 (UTC)

Here's the issues I found:
 * "The Courage C60 was a Le Mans Prototype" I'd put (LMP) next to it just so that when LMP is used later on lay readers get where the abbreviation is from.
 * "and it was in this format that the C60 had its most success" feels worded a little oddly at the end, not sure how I'd reword it though.
 * "similar to that found on open-wheel racing car at the front of the car," on an open-wheel
 * Double check comma usage in the second half of Design particularly, but throughout the article as well; there's quite a few extra commas that aren't needed.
 * "Boullion partnered Rédon to fourth place, and the fastest of the non-Audi entries." rm and
 * " previous one; by winning the 1000 km" should be comma instead of semicolon
 * Overall, the article feels on the repetitive side, since the second half is essentially just noting places in races. Not really a GA issue granted, and given the subject matter I'm not sure myself how to make it flow better without losing the encyclopedic nature. I would work on that before any attempt at FAC, though.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 23:43, 7 June 2015 (UTC)
 * OK, Wizardman, I think I've done the things you've requested. I don't intend to take this to FAC, mainly because it's a step too far for my writing abilities. :)  Luke no 94  (tell Luke off here) 00:13, 8 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Fixes look good, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  01:54, 8 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. :) Luke no 94  (tell Luke off here) 08:43, 8 June 2015 (UTC)