Talk:Crash Bandicoot: The Wrath of Cortex/GA1

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 03:32, 12 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "Its initial release was" → "It was first released"
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * "instalment" → "installment" (typo)
 * My spellcheck says the opposite. Is this because my computer is British? &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * The "Characters of Crash Bandicoot" links should be List of Crash Bandicoot series characters
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * It would help to give Crunch's name during his first mention
 * Done (moved things around) &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * "mixed to positive reviews" should simply be "mixed reviews"
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Sales figures and Xbox/GameCube releases should be included
 * Included a sales figure. The other release dates were in before, but were a repetitive soup which is presented better in the infobox. &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:15, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Gameplay
 * All characters except for Crash and Cortex should link to "List of Crash Bandicoot series characters"
 * Link Doctor Neo Cortex
 * "Each level contains a 'Bonus Platform' that leads to a special bonus area, where the player must navigate through a maze and collect everything in sight. Once a bonus area is completed, it cannot be played again unless the level is replayed."..... while the description of the "bonus" stages is spot-on, not every level contains them (i.e. flight levels and Atlasphere levels).
 * Replace "instructing Crash or Coco to collect" with "collecting"
 * The "O" shouldn't be capitalized for "Game over"
 * All done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:18, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Plot
 * Characters
 * See about note in lead about "Characters in Crash Bandicoot" links
 * I'm not sure if "kindly" is a neutral description for Aku Aku, even though he is seen as the "good guy", or "evil" for Uka Uka despite being seen as the "bad guy"
 * "A number of" is an exaggeration when listing four recurring villains
 * "assistant" or "main assistant" would be better than "right-hand man"
 * Something about "particularly" for "particularly Crunch" reads awkwardly
 * "bad-tempered" → "temperamental"
 * I'm skeptical about the use of "stick-in-the-mud"


 * All done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:22, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Story
 * "newly built" isn't really needed
 * Rather than "unimpressive evil productivity", I feel it would be better to quote Uka Uka by using "track record for spreading evil"
 * "and forces them"..... a more accurate term would actually be orders
 * "genetically enhanced superweapon of unbelievable strength" should be in quotation marks
 * "Uka Uka then tells the group a tale of a battle between the Ancient Ancestors and the Elementals"..... he doesn't so much tell a story about the Elementals as he does suggest using them
 * "do away with"..... eliminate
 * See above note in calling Uka Uka "evil"
 * "snapping him out of" → "and releases him from"


 * All done


 * Development
 * I'd add release dates here as well as GameCube announcements
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:28, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Reception
 * ’ should be ' per MOS:QUOTEMARKS
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * "Despite the less-than-stellar reviews" can simply be replaced with "Commercially"
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * How many copies did the Xbox and GameCube versions sell?
 * , this is my last concern; we're really close! Just add these sales and I'll pass. Snuggums (talk / edits) 16:07, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * , this is proving much more difficult than I presumed. The closest I can find is this, which is user-created and thus invalid. &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 16:43, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Understood, though everything else looks good. I'm passing now, well done :D! Snuggums (talk / edits) 17:38, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * References
 * FN4: "jp.playstation.com" should read "PlayStation.com" and not be italicized
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * FN40: "Weekly Famitsu" should read Famitsu in italics
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * FN's 41–52: Dates should be in Month-Day-Year or Day-Month-Year per MOS:DATE
 * Done &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Two dead links
 * Removed &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 15:43, 24 March 2015 (UTC)


 * Overall
 * Well-written?
 * Prose quality: Decent, but needs improvements
 * Manual of Style compliance: Close, but not quite


 * Verifiable?
 * Reference layout: Several need fixing
 * Reliable sources: All references are reliable
 * No original research: Dead links make things harder to verify


 * Broad in coverage?
 * Major aspects: Could use some expansion
 * Focused: No excess detail


 * Neutral?: Almost


 * Stable?: Nothing to worry about


 * Illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * Appropriate licensing: All good
 * Relevance and captioning: Looks fine


 * Pass or Fail?: Placing this on hold for seven days. Main concern is prose. Snuggums (talk / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 08:33, 24 March 2015 (UTC)