Talk:Crazier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HJMitchell    You rang?   10:39, 11 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for taking it on! Liqudluck ✽ talk  00:53, 12 January 2010 (UTC)


 * No worries. I like you guys- you don't make me work too hard on the reviews! HJMitchell    You rang?   04:10, 12 January 2010 (UTC)


 * general
 * checklinks is fine.
 * I'm slightly concerned that File:Taylor Swift Crazier music video.jpg might not square up with WP:NFCC, but I'll get a second opinion from an expert.
 * The other image and the audio clip are both used appropriately and have the relevant tags on them.


 * background
 * "embodies the album's theme"- since it's the first mention after the lead, you should name the album.
 * Specified. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 01:52, 15 January 2010 (UTC)


 * The prose is excellent right up until "In addition...", where the rest of the paragraph lets it down; it just needs to flow a bot better, but nothing a brief copyedit couldn't cure


 * critical reception
 * Prose could again do with some work. Resist the temptation just to list reviews with a "person of place said..."- engage your reader!
 * Reduced the use of that. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 18:22, 16 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Might be an idea to add "[Cyrus]" after " than any of Miley..."
 * -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 18:15, 16 January 2010 (UTC)


 * music video
 * name "the song" for first mention in a section
 * Switched to "Crazier"'s music video. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 01:51, 15 January 2010 (UTC)


 * more importantly, the section is completely unreferenced
 * There are no reliable sources that have the release date of the music video. There are many other unreliable sources like accessshowbiz. Disney.com doesn't even have it but Walt Disney Studio's Italian page it, do we add that? -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 18:26, 16 January 2010 (UTC)
 * You speak Italian too? Yes, Italian sources work- will you add it? Liquidluck ✽ talk  02:34, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Oops... I guess I forgot to put a key word, "Youtube" - it's their Youtube page. That's why I'm worried. And I don't speak Italian fluidly, I know a lot of words but cannot put them in a sentence. I can understand it though. -- ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 03:38, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah. That throws a bit of a spanner in the works. Youtube is not a reliable source. Is ther anything else? At all? HJMitchell    You rang?   09:09, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * I ran another extensive google search and nothing. -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 22:31, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Can you find anything to verify that it was an excerpt from the movie? That would be enough, then you could just remove the other stuff and I could pass this *crosses fingers*. HJ Mitchell  |  fancy a chat?   22:41, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
 * After scavenging the web for almost an hour I found a reference, AOL. -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 18:12, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * " in which Cyrus' character, Miley Stewart, spots her love interest, Travis Body played by Lucas Till, riding a brown horse" is not very nice to read. It would probably flow better if you just put the actor's name in parenthesis.
 * brackets added. -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 01:51, 15 January 2010 (UTC)

Overall, I'm very happy with the quality of the article. The main issues are the prose and the lack of references in the music video section. I'll keep this page and the article on my watchlist, but drop by my talk page if you need a hand. HJMitchell   You rang?   04:10, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
 * I believe everything is done. -- <b style="font-family:tahoma; color:LightBlue;">ipodnano05</b> * <sup style="font-family:tahoma; color:SteelBlue;">leave@message 18:12, 30 January 2010 (UTC)