Talk:Crazy Crazy / Sakura no Mori/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 10:04, 28 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:38, 8 June 2024 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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 * Pass/fail:

I have a good amount of time today, so will crack on with this article now! --K. Peake 07:38, 8 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Why is rock piped to rock music in the infobox but Japanese rock elsewhere?
 * ✅ the link to Japanese rock


 * "as double A-sides on the second single from his" → "as double A-sides for his"
 * ✅. Also changed the start of the lead to be consistent with the other Hoshino articles


 * "The J-pop and rock single was released by" → "The songs were released as the album's second single by" since the release belongs here and move genre to the sentence of the homage and composition
 * ✅. Added the sentence "Categorized as J-pop and rock, the single features varied sound throughout its track listing" to the other paragraph


 * To make the first para four sentences, I would recommend adding a sentence about how Hoshino's writing style lacked deep thought and used lines he liked, as the background section mentions for both songs
 * ✅. I've added this with a semicolon after "Both tracks were written by Hoshino", if you want it completely as its own sentence I can move it, but I thought this flowed well


 * Pipe pop to Pop music


 * Wikilink disco


 * Mention the Cherry Blossom theme and that the lyrics describe excitement too


 * Wikilink acoustic guitar


 * The sentence about the single's pre-release previews should be swapped and use "first part" to refer to "Crazy Crazy" and second part for the other one, so you are not using their titles repetitively in this para
 * ✅ to "second A-side" and "the first"


 * "and respectively reached number" → "and respectively reached numbers"


 * "A black-and-white music video for "Crazy Crazy"" → "A black-and-white music video for the former" with the wikilink


 * Add a sentence at the end of this para mentioning notable live performances since you did a whole section for this

Background and production

 * Img looks good and the prose is solid in paragraph one!
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad


 * The similarity to "Shiranai" is not sourced
 * From the Musica interview: "最初は'知らない'みたいな曲だったんですよ. 浪々としたというか、悲壮感漂う曲だったの"


 * Remove wikilink on Masatoshi Nakano


 * Pipe blue jazz to Twelve-bar blues


 * "a bar in New Orleans."" → "a bar in New Orleans"." per MOS:QUOTE and re-invoke the ref here since it uses a direct quote


 * None of the first sentence in the third para is sourced; is this on page 2 of the source since I cannot get that to translate and if so, please add as a separate ref here?
 * There's an rp template so I don't think the source needs to be changed. The exact sentence is "J-WAVEの春のキャンペーンソングだったので、じゃあ、桜ソングを作ろうと思って" if that helps


 * Wikilink J-pop


 * Pipe Japanese scales to Japanese musical scales


 * Lowercase the Emotions per MOS:THEMUSIC

Composition and lyrics

 * Audio samples looks good!
 * "and, in certain elements, crazy, supported by a" → "and noted the support of a" since the crazy part is not mentioned in the source
 * The sentence is: "特にジャズピアノにドスのきいたドラムはいい感じに狂っている" - 狂っている means to be crazy


 * Wikilink music video


 * Not all of the comp is sourced for "Sakura no Mori"; is some from the Apple Music source I can't see?
 * Could you specify what is missing? All credits should be featured on Apple Music execpt the chorus vocals, which is covered by CDJournal


 * Wikilink acoustic guitar

Release and promotion

 * The source says March 21, not February 21
 * "on February 25," → "on April 9, 2014," per the source


 * Pipe "Barbara" to Baka no Uta
 * WP:NOTBROKEN, also for convenience since I plan to create an article for this song at some point


 * Pipe black-and-white to Black and white


 * "was released through" → "was released as the second single of Yellow Dancer through"


 * Last para looks good!

Critical reception

 * "received positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews"


 * "singling out the jazz piano as particularly" → "seeing the jazz piano and thumping drums as particularly" but I don't see the crazy quote unless my translator is bad?


 * "of the mainstream."" → "of the mainstream"." per MOS:QUOTE and re-invoke the ref since this is a direct quote


 * "over the "dancing" instrumentation." → "over the dance instrumentation." since quoting is not needed for one word


 * "not to dance to."" → not to dance to"." but the info here does not seem to be sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
 * The sentence is "腰で踊らずにはいられない" - I ran it through a translator myself now and it shows "I can't help but dance with my hips", but the reviewer never mentions themself in the text so that is the translator filling in blanks


 * Last para looks good!

Commercial performance

 * First para looks good!
 * "on adult contemporary airplay." → "on Adult Contemporary Airplay." with the pipe
 * This is for the Billboard Japan chart but the article seems to be about the US magazine

Live performances

 * "on Gen Hoshino's YouTube channel." → "on Hoshino's YouTube channel." on the text


 * Italicize Two Beat in Yokohama Arena
 * The article is talking about the concert itself and technically not the live album so I think italics would be inappropriate


 * Italicize Count Down TV


 * Mention the two-day concert was in February


 * The bass part is not sourced
 * It is mentioned earlier in the article that Okamoto played bass during the show

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel and I would recommend adding a div col
 * ✅. There is a div col and has been for a while; is it not displaying?

Track listing

 * Pipe "Barbara" to Baka no Uta
 * See above comment

Charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Flawless, especially that you have started adding various links after I mentioned this before!

Final comments and verdict

 * after this review went quickly and I congratulate you on the hard work already having brought this article to how good it currently is, even having taken on past suggestions already which is fabulous! --K. Peake 10:50, 8 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I think everything is fixed up! IanTEB (talk) 11:36, 8 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Well done on such a fantastic response through covering the vast majority of these points, despite some being harder than others! I have edited the adult contemporary part now for clarity since I understand it is not the same as the US version; only thing remaining now is to remove the publishers from the refs I mentioned since citing Mikiki is enough. --K. Peake 07:05, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Done! IanTEB (talk) 08:50, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I commend your speed and newfound skills! --K. Peake 20:53, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Once again, thank you so much for the review! I'll make sure to return the favor with a review on one of the Kanye articles :) IanTEB (talk) 21:26, 9 June 2024 (UTC)