Talk:Crippled America/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 09:01, 9 May 2018 (UTC)

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Discussion
Some first thoughts in slightly random order. What an excellent article. I have no idea why it took so long to find a reviewer. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:54, 9 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "Like his previous work Time to Get Tough (2011), Crippled America outlined Trump's political agenda as he ran in the U.S. presidential campaign on a conservative platform." suggests that the 2011 book " outlined Trump's political agenda as he ran in the ...". I thought that the earlier book was for an earlier election?
 * "NPR" should be in full at first mention. According to the MoS so should CNN, but personally I am willing to let that go.
 * Not a GA fail issue but "as well as the media's portrayal of him —‌ that journalists": should be a non-spaced em dash or a spaced en dash.
 * Optional style point. If it were me I would start the main text of the article with 'In Crippled America Donald Trump describes his views on...'.
 * "On U.S. domestic policy, Trump subdivides the book into chapters on immigration, health care, the economy, education, social programs, and energy in the United States." "On U.S. domestic policy..." and "...in the United States". I think that you only need one of these.
 * There are a number of upper case letters which the MoS would advise against ("man's", "Social Security"), but allowable at GA.
 * "... can be utilized to broker diplomatic deals on an international spectrum." I am honestly not sure what this means. Poetic, but IMO unclear. Perhaps "... the international scene" or similar?
 * "selling out of stock the paperback version and an additional 199,000 hardcover copies by March 2016." Optionally, "...in the paperback..."
 * I have inserted a thin space.
 * "Townsend observed, the book, like Trump's earlier work The Art of the Deal (1987)...". 'Townsend observed that, the book...'?
 * "He furthered assessed Crippled America as "first and foremost, a business book",". 'further'.
 * "criticized the book for lambasting about the author's business ventures". I am not sure that you can "lambast about". And did he really lambast ("scold, reprimand or criticize harshly") his own business ventures?
 * I believe I have addressed your initial thoughts. Thank you in particular for pointing out the Time to Get Tough and Crippled America comparison in the lead; it did not convey what I intended but I think my adjustment clarifies the sentence. Let me know what more I should do. Thanks again!TheGracefulSlick (talk) 15:43, 9 May 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you. It turns out that they were all of my thoughts. See my summation above. A fine article. I can only repeat my amazement that it has sat for so long; it was one of the more straightforward I have assessed. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:03, 9 May 2018 (UTC)