Talk:Critical response to She Has a Name/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 16:05, 26 April 2013 (UTC)

I'll be undertaking this review.

On a preliminary point I think the premise of the article is clearly justified in light of the content. I have no reason to believe, without prejudice to someone doing so at a future date, this article with be merged with She Has a Name. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:05, 26 April 2013 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Please check my changes to ensure I aven't introduced any errors or (as always) to make further improvements. I've made some changes to the lead, which have ensured it meets WP:LEAD guidelines.
 * The changes look great. I've made changes to the body for consistency. Neelix (talk) 03:44, 28 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Prose now assessed. I madde one minor change based on WP:MOSQUOTE. What I would say is that some of the paragraphs feel a little thrown together (in terms of ideas and flow). However that is not an actionable concern for GA, since they do make some sense and are grammatically correct. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 17:46, 1 May 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * File:Andrew Kooman.jpg: OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Hug.jpg, ditto - useful because no issue of set, design, etc. therefore arises; File:9.000919 Pattaya streetscene5.jpg - no limits placed on use by issuer (unsure of personality rights, etc; some attempt to anonymise the photograph has been made); File:She Has a Name 2012 - Marta.jpg, another OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Voices.jpg ditto, fine. All files that include identifiable living people may be identified as such, but this is voluntary and not a GA requirement. Overall, well illustrated: securing such useful photographs from a provider has proved very useful.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * File:Andrew Kooman.jpg: OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Hug.jpg, ditto - useful because no issue of set, design, etc. therefore arises; File:9.000919 Pattaya streetscene5.jpg - no limits placed on use by issuer (unsure of personality rights, etc; some attempt to anonymise the photograph has been made); File:She Has a Name 2012 - Marta.jpg, another OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Voices.jpg ditto, fine. All files that include identifiable living people may be identified as such, but this is voluntary and not a GA requirement. Overall, well illustrated: securing such useful photographs from a provider has proved very useful.
 * File:Andrew Kooman.jpg: OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Hug.jpg, ditto - useful because no issue of set, design, etc. therefore arises; File:9.000919 Pattaya streetscene5.jpg - no limits placed on use by issuer (unsure of personality rights, etc; some attempt to anonymise the photograph has been made); File:She Has a Name 2012 - Marta.jpg, another OTRS, fine; File:She Has a Name 2012 - Voices.jpg ditto, fine. All files that include identifiable living people may be identified as such, but this is voluntary and not a GA requirement. Overall, well illustrated: securing such useful photographs from a provider has proved very useful.

I've tweaked two captions. Please confirm or change that Marta is "(center)", but I shan't let that hold up the review.
 * Yes, Marta is center. I have also added the names of the people in the images to the captions. Neelix (talk) 03:44, 28 April 2013 (UTC)


 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I've been reflected on one issue. Many of the individual sentences copy the idea behind the source; the point of consideration is whether there is any way to avoid doing that. On the positive, the article moves between sources quickly, so no ideas are systematically taken from the same source. For this reason, I think the article is GA-compliant. I think going forward the article needs more narrative so it feels less like a series of statements. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 18:25, 7 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I've been reflected on one issue. Many of the individual sentences copy the idea behind the source; the point of consideration is whether there is any way to avoid doing that. On the positive, the article moves between sources quickly, so no ideas are systematically taken from the same source. For this reason, I think the article is GA-compliant. I think going forward the article needs more narrative so it feels less like a series of statements. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 18:25, 7 May 2013 (UTC)