Talk:Croatian Spring/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! Please be somewhat patient with me, as it is a long article, but I promise I'll be as thorough and quick as I can! —  Ghost River  21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Commas around "or Maspok"
 * "initially not involved" "not initially involved"

Economic crisis

 * "advocated favouring" "advocated in favour of"
 * "in 1964" "the following year"

Politicisation of reforms

 * "the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM) Krste Crvenkovski" "Krste Crvenkovski, the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM),"

Peak of the reformist forces

 * "decided to shelve plans"

Grievances

 * Good

Language question

 * "There were also several denunciations of the Declaration on the Name and Status of the Croatian Literary Language from the SKJ within days." "Within days, there were also several denunciations of the declaration from the SKJ."

SKH factions

 * Comma after "and secretary Miko Tripalo"

SKH involvement until mid-1971

 * The first three paragraphs all begin with "On [date]" – not quite proseline, but still should be broken up
 * "that Dabčević-Kučar orders" "that Dabčević-Kučar order"

Looking for role models from the past

 * "Catholic Church for Croatian culture" "Catholic Church in Croatian culture"

Demands for autonomy and a new constitution

 * "in establishment of the" "in establishing"
 * "Serbian nationalism flared up "
 * No comma needed after "75 percent of the coverage would be on Croatian topics"

Outside Croatia

 * "were advocating annexing" "were advocating the annexation of"

Foreign policy considerations

 * Comma should be after "for the independence of Croatia" rather than after "or alternatively"

November plenum and student protest

 * Either colon or parentheses after "hosted by the republic's leadership", but not both

Karadordevo meeting and the purges

 * "New Croatia" should be italicized

Maintenance of reforms

 * In the first sentence, the election of Perišin is stated to be ten months after the constitutional amendments, but the events are stated as if he was already in that position
 * "anti-Communist" "anti-communist"
 * Pirker's death, in a sentence of its own, feels somewhat trivial, as the aftermath of his death is limited to his number of funeral attendees
 * "leading it to lose the support of the Serbs of Croatia." "and subsequently lost support from the Serbs of Croatia."
 * Comma after "were defeated by Grbić"

Legacy in the final decades of Yugoslavia

 * "1970s purges" "purges of the 1970s"

General comments

 * All images are properly licensed and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good at 20%

That's all I've got! Putting on hold now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. —  Ghost River  18:56, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

thank you very much for taking time to review this GAN. I have edited the article after your review to implement your suggestions and address issues you have raised. These include the following two which I'd like to briefly explain here too:


 * Perišin election dating is correct. There were two different sets of constitutional amendments: one in 1971 amending Yugoslav constitution, and another in 1972 amending the Constitution of the Socialist Republic of Croatia (all Yugoslav federated republics had their own separate constitution). I have added a brief clarification to this passage.
 * According to Ramet, Pirker's funeral is relevant for the article insofar that the size of the crowd following the purges (and during the period when some forms of repression against individuals associated with Croatian Spring were still ongoing) demonstrated the broad support for the ousted SKH leadership. I have added a sentence to the previously single-sentence paragraph to clarify this.

Could you please take another look at those edits. Cheers--Tomobe03 (talk) 23:18, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for making those edits. I think that there's some confusion regarding the Perišin election. My central comment being raised here is that the structure of the sentence creates a confusing chronology. You have the main event (the constitutional amendments), which happened in February, and then in the middle is the election, which happens 10 months later. If I am understanding properly, Perišin was not President of the Executive Council of SR Croatia when these amendments were passed, but the phrasing "with Ivo Perišin having been made" makes it sound as if he were in this role at the time. I hope that clarifies a little more what I was trying to get at. —  Ghost River  15:08, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , oh right. That's a typo, Perišin was elected in December 1971, as his predecesor (Haramija) was removed from the position within the context of the purges discussed in the article. I've corrected that and added a source to support the date.--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:50, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for clarifying! Passing now! —  Ghost River  16:53, 14 October 2021 (UTC)