Talk:Cyclone Hollanda/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Please bear with me hink, I'm going to do my best to review this article. :) It might take a few days to finish, sorry.  HurricaneFan 25 
 * I'll be doing a prose/writing around 14:00 UTC. Gotta bounce.  HurricaneFan 25  12:04, 11 October 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Comments:


 * "...in the middle of the Indian Ocean." (lede) "In the middle" sounds a bit awkward.
 * We regularly use that in the Atlantic (in the middle of the Atlantic Ocean, Gulf of Mexico, Caribbean Sea). Would you recommend "central" instead? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Yep, that's fine.  HurricaneFan 25  13:39, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Alright, I clarified. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:42, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "Hollanda destroyed or severely damaged 450 houses" (lede) Why not use "and"?
 * Oh, that wouldn't be true. It destroyed or heavily damaged the 450. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Why not link to the Cyclone Ivy subsection in the 90/95 article? (lede)
 * Good call. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "...organized convection, or thunderstorms." (MH) You've linked to convection, and it basically tells what convection is, so there's no need to write "or thunderstorms".
 * Alright, that works. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "...as it moved more poleward" (MH) what does "poleward" mean?
 * Toward the pole, either north or south pole depending on the hemisphere. I feel it's a pretty common word, but I can change it if you want. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "...and about half without telephone." (impact) Sounds a bit weird, put "service" at the end of the sentence?
 * Good cal1! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "...cyclone killed two people[4]" (impact) Add punctuation before the ref, a comma would suffice.
 * MK. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Ref #10 appears to be broken ("Colin Legum/2000")


 * Ref #15 is broken ("Economist Intelligence Unit/1995")
 * I fixed both. It was an issue of spacing in cite web. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Happy to pass. :)  HurricaneFan 25  13:42, 11 October 2011 (UTC)