Talk:Cyclone Kesiny/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)

Because someone in this project is working on timelines, I will review this article instead of working on Kalunde. YE  Pacific   Hurricane You know the drill. On hold for as long as you need. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "Tropical Cyclone Kesiny was the first recorded tropical cyclone – the equivalent of a minimal hurricane – to make landfall in the month of may in the south-West Indian Ocean" Am I insane or should the words "in the Atlantic be added after "hurricane"? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Probably a bit insane, given your later comments :P But I don't think it's needed. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "Its formation was the result of an increase in the Madden–Julian oscillation, " an increase of what? Timeline wthin WPTC? Fishpsinner articles? Intelligent people? Monkeys? Water? Pokemons? More Homers? Bugs? Ants? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * None of the above :P It's linked. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * MJO is linked indeed. Ill let this go since I am nice. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:06, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * " At least 33 bridges were destroyed, and many roads were damaged. A total of 33 people were killed, and 1,200 people were injured." Any number of homes damaged? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I looked, but didn't have any totals. I could add that 500,000 people were affected, but I'm not a huge fan of that metric in the lede, since it's not as definitive as number of damaged/destroyed homes. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Agreed here. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:06, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "The same system spawned a disturbance in the northern Indian Ocean that later struck Oman as a tropical cyclone" which system the 2002 Oman cyclone? My brain? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Not your brain. It refers to the previous sentence. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I meant "which system" in that the system that "later struck Oman as a tropical cyclone". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:06, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * The MJO increase, as written in the article. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:07, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I did not want to know what caused the development of the Oman system. Instead, I want a link to the system that struck Oman in 2002. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:11, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Ooh, why didn't you say so? It's already linked in that sentence. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * " This occurred despite little change in atmospheric conditions" where they bad? And I'd combine this setence with "intesfcation" part of the first sentence in the paragraph. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * This refers to the previous paragraph when Kesiny weakened. So, nothing really changed, but it intensified anyway. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "request of the Malagasy government" Malagasy government? wtf is that? Wikilink it plz. Thank you. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Please keep your tone civil. I'm not sure if you were upset or something, but I don't appreciate comments like "wtf is that". I linked twice to the Malagasy election, and didn't think a dedicated link again was necessary. FWIW, Malagasy is the adjective form of Madagascar, but I could've told you to JFGI :P --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, that explains it. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:06, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Make Ref 1 consistent with Ref 2-15. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  20:20, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:00, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Good. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:06, 20 January 2013 (UTC)