Talk:Cyclone Mekunu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 08:40, 27 January 2019 (UTC)


 * I'll let someone else take Bondo but seeing as I GANed like 10 articles in the past 8 months and this is my 4th GA review in general (yes, all 4 have been yours but the only other chance I have is when not one but two people tried to take GC's GAN before I could), I need to try to avoid a backlog, even if it screws up the GA reviewing balance. I'll get to this by midweek. YE Pacific Hurricane 08:40, 27 January 2019 (UTC)
 * Or you could review Mineral evolution. I am not a fan of claim a good article nominations where it is going to take a few days to write it. You should do one at a time to be fair. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 14:29, 27 January 2019 (UTC)


 * That's not even a WPTC GAN, which is what I was referring to above when trying to avoid a backlog in the OP. YE Pacific Hurricane 20:17, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Meh, just protesting on the wait :P I'm done with the Luban review btw. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 21:15, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * I'll pass both at the same time most likely, FYI. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * "The second named storm of the 2018 North Indian Ocean cyclone season, Mekunu developed out of a low pressure area on May 21" links to LPA. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * Mk. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * "While near Socotra, Cyclone Mekunu killed 20 people when its heavy rainfall causing landslides and flooding." I'll just say this doesn't sound like your writing. You should be able to figure out what's wrong with this. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Actually, upon going further you should just re-write the impact bit to the lead. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Rewrote that part of lede. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * "At the same time of the disturbance's formation, Cyclone Sagar was located in the Gulf of Aden.[1]" what does that have to do with the storm? YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * There were two storms existing at the same time, an unusual event in the North Indian Ocean. The storm storms affected some of the same places. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * ", due to decreasing wind shear and the presence of an upper-level anticyclone nearby.[2][4] " given those two are heavily correlated, that's redundant. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * So how should I fix it... you're the one studying this stuff, I'm just a musician :P ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Axe one. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:14, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Axed! :) ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk )  02:01, 2 February 2019 (UTC)


 * "Across the Yemeni mainland, Mekunu killed four people and injured 20 others.[16]" why is 20 not spelled out when 4 is? YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Changed. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * "After the scope of the damage became evident on Socotra, Saudi Arabia, United Arab Emirates (UAE), Qatar, and Kuwait provided shelter, medical, and other emergency supplies. Saudi Arabia sent its first plane of aid on May 27.[11][16][12][23] The UAE also sent helicopters to search for missing people, and airlifted 17 people injured during the storm. The crew from the UAE helped reopen the island's roads.[16][12][24] " this is an easy mistake to make wen dealing with mentioning aftermath from a bunch of countries at once, but order the refs numerically. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)\
 * Fixed. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)

Well, this article is a tale of two halves. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:31, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * And that half has become... a little bit better thanks to your review. I believe I fixed everything you said. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:23, 1 February 2019 (UTC)