Talk:Cyclone Olivia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 12:36, 13 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Lede
 * The storm moved generally to the southwest or west, gradually intensifying off Western Australia. – I think just "moved generally to the southwest" would suffice here
 * Fair enough. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * On 8 April, Olivia intensified into a severe tropical cyclone... – link STC to Tropical cyclone scales
 * Ack, good call. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Every house in Pannawonica sustained some damage, many of them being. – I think you forgot to finish this sentence...just a hunch
 * Hmm, I have no idea! Removed :) ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * +1 for adding some preps this time around!
 * WHOO!! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Meteorological history
 * A surge in the trade winds interacted with the monsoon trough to produce an area of convection. – Need some sort of date here, even if it's just a month (year will also need to be included)
 * Eek, yea, otherwise that's extremely random. Thanks :) ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Shortly thereafter, the BoM upgraded the system to a Category 1 cyclone – TC scales link needed here
 * Added. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * ... JTWC to upgrade it to a Category 1 equivalent on the Saffir–Simpson Hurricane Scale (SSHS), estimating 1 minute sustained winds of 120 km/h (75 mph). – Need to mention that JTWC uses one-minute winds around here, rather than when it reaches its peak
 * Striking mistake on my part. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 21:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Around the same time, the BoM upgraded Olivia to a severe tropical cyclone, assessing similar wind speeds. – same as above, but for BoM and ten-minute winds
 * I added "assessing similar wind speeds but sustained over 10 minutes." Does that work? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * By 9 April, the system attained Category 4 intensity as it continued to strengthen. – BoM or JTWC? (source is to BoM, but it needs to be specified)
 * Thanks, clarified. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Impact and aftermath
 * I rejiggered the section headers to split off the "Records" section, hopefully this isn't an issue~
 * It looks perfect! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Olivia also produced gusts of 267 km/h (166 mph) at Varanus Island, which was the highest wind gust on record in Australia, until the higher reading on Barrow Island was confirmed. – Might be worth specifying that the higher reading was from Olivia—even though it should be super obvious given the opening sentence of the article—just to be extra sure.
 * "until the higher reading on Barrow Island during the storm was confirmed." - that work? Good call on clarifying. Any records need to be very specific. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Throughout the small town, 55 houses lost their roof and another 27 were damaged. – If that accounts for every home in Pannawonica, I'd suggest rewording it to "Of the 82 houses in the small town, 55 lost their roof." (just to avoid some slight redundancy)
 * Perfect. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Solid article all around and rather close to being promoted. Should be an easy fix so I'm putting it on-hold for the time being. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 12:36, 13 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much! I appreciate the thorough review. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, passing the article. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 21:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)