Talk:Cyprus in the Eurovision Song Contest 2010/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)

I will start this review tomorrow! --K. Peake 20:50, 17 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Shouldn't Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis be italicised in the infobox like it is elsewhere?
 * "in the selection of Jon Lilygreen and" → "in the selection of Lilygreen and"
 * Change on February 7 2010 to merely in February 2010 since the full date is not notable here for a selection contest
 * "Cyprus placed tenth" → "Cyprus placed 10th" per MOS:NUM
 * "and placed twenty-first out" → "and placed 21st out"

Background

 * "twenty-seven times since" → "27 times since" per MOS:NUM
 * "which it achieved three times:" → "achieving this three times:"
 * Remove commas around Cyprus Broadcasting Corporation (CyBC)
 * "at the 2010 Eurovision Song Contest" → "at the Eurovision Song Contest 2010" with the wikilink
 * Not all of the various methods are sourced
 * Remove "compete at Eurovision" from the end of the sentence because this is implied

Eurovision 2010: Epilogi tis kypriakis symmetochis

 * None of the info appears to be sourced by [4], unless there is an archive mentioning this?
 * Remove comma after received submissions
 * The 1996, 2002 and 2005 participations are not sourced, nor is Mike Connaris' involvement
 * "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat as well as in Greece on ET1 and online" → "broadcast on RIK 1, RIK Sat and in Greece on ERT1 as well as online" but the website part is not sourced
 * "The song received the" → "The entry received the"
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Wales, though this fact itself is a nice addition!

Promotion

 * "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders made" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders made"
 * "On 12 March, Jon Lilygreen and" → "On 12 March 2010, Lilygreen and" per this being a new sub-section
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Netherlands
 * Pipe Marga Bult to Marcha

At Eurovision

 * Wikilink Jon Lilygreen on the img text
 * Remove wikilink on RIK 1, also not all of those broadcasters are sourced

Performances

 * "Jon Lilygreen during a rehearsal" → "Lilygreen during a rehearsal" on the img text
 * "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May," → "Lilygreen and the Islanders took part in technical rehearsals on 19 and 23 May 2010,"
 * "The Cypriot performance featured Jon Lilygreen" → "The Cypriot performance featured Lilygreen"
 * "It was later revealed that Cyprus placed tenth" → "The country placed 10th" per MOS:NUM, also this is from the same source as the previous sentence
 * "the ten qualifying countries." → "the 10 qualifying countries."
 * "Jon Lilygreen and the Islanders once again" → "Lilygreen and the Islanders once again"
 * "on 28 and 29 May before" → "on 28 and 29 May 2010 before"
 * "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"
 * "Cyprus finished in twenty-first place" → "Cyprus finished in 21st place"

Voting

 * "the country they represent." → "the country each represented."
 * "Cyprus scored 57 points." → "the nation scored 57 points."
 * "who announced the Cypriot votes" → "who announced their votes"
 * 37 is the ref that backs up the voting info, so should be invoked after that as well as the last sentence of the para
 * "and awarded by Cyprus in" → "and awarded by the nation in"

Points awarded to Cyprus

 * Good

Points awarded by Cyprus

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice work on this though! --K. Peake 16:16, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for another detailed review! I've made the changes you've requested, though could you please clarify this comment: "of their semi-final performance" → "of their semi-final position"? Grk1011 (talk) 14:25, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
 * When I click on the source, the only thing identical about the two separate occasions is the position they performed from. --K. Peake 15:01, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I didn't see that in the ref either, so I just reworded it. Let me know if any other issues remain! Grk1011 (talk) 18:58, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, nice job on this! --K. Peake 07:29, 21 June 2022 (UTC)