Talk:Cyrtophora citricola/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pax85 (talk · contribs) 22:05, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Additional comments

 * We will conduct the new review on this page. I'll try not to rehash anything that has already been addressed in the previous review. If you have any questions, please feel free to ask any time! - Pax  Verbum  22:24, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Prose and content
Note: As I work through the article, I will place particular comments here under the corresponding section, sometimes grouping sections as I find time to look them over. I will probably do a bit of light copyediting on the way as well.

Items in bold need to be addressed directly.

Lead deleted the last couple of sentences M.s.w.lee (talk) 19:46, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Overall, very good. Lead summarizes the article well and uses sources appropriately. I would say that the end of the third paragraph gets pretty detailed for a lead section. Perhaps rewording or even deleting the last couple of sentences, making sure that the more detailed information is in the article, of course.

Body It looks good! Thanks for restructuring the section and improving its readability! M.s.w.lee (talk) 20:00, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Very clear and approachable. Completed some light copy editing throughout, which included minor punctuation, flow, or structure issues. Some of the terminologies can get a bit heady for non-biology types, but I think it's OK due to the linking of possibly unfamiliar terms.
 * Web subsection: In the last paragraph, I brought some of the sentences together and restructured a bit for ease of reading and clarity. You may want to take a look at this.