Talk:D. Djajakusuma/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * "to a noble, government-employee father and his wife" -> consider rephrasing this; as is "noble" seems to be used as a generic adjective ("he is noble and grand") rather than specifically stating he's a member of the nobility. Reworded. It had originally been linked "As a child he enjoyed watching films and stage performances, at times sneaking out of his home after curfew to watch performances" -> repetition of "performances". Try "productions" for the first one instead. Done, ish. "despite his parents hopes" -> missing possessive Done "which were considered not compliant with the need for modernisation" -> try "incompatible" rather than "not compliant" Sounds good "garnered him best director at the first FFI in 1954" -> "garnered him the award for best director at the first FFI in 1954" Done "Djajakusuma's later film Bimo Kroda won Best Director at the 1967" -> surely he, and not the film, won the award. How's this?
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * Grand.
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * Yep.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Not a problem.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Looks good.
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * Suitable and well-used; little rough but well worth having.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Shouldn't take a lot of work here; holding for seven days (doubt it'll be that long though :P). GRAPPLE   X  00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Seven minutes, maybe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:41, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * It's almost like you saw this one coming. GRAPPLE   X  00:54, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Or a fortunate overlap of time zones. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:57, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Shouldn't take a lot of work here; holding for seven days (doubt it'll be that long though :P). GRAPPLE   X  00:34, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Seven minutes, maybe. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:41, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * It's almost like you saw this one coming. GRAPPLE   X  00:54, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Or a fortunate overlap of time zones. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:57, 24 October 2012 (UTC)