Talk:Daisy Pearce

Pre-FA thoughts/feedback/whatever-you-wanna-call-it...
Okay some queries I'll post here....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:04, 6 June 2021 (UTC)


 * ...where she was adjudged best afield. - is it really "afield"? not "on-field"?
 * I reckon I've seen "best afield" and "best on ground" in equal measure, so just went with "best afield" because it's shorter. 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Try to avoid too many consecutive paras starting "(Daisy) Pearce..." if possible....
 * I was aware of this when doing the big rewrite, but not sure how I'd be able to change any of the opening sentences to the paragraphs that start with "Pearce..." in a way that would improve them. 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Not thrilled about the term "media performer" but can't really think of an alternative...she is clearly not just a commentator...hmmm
 * "Media performer/personality" does get thrown around quite often in the football media to describe people who hold multiple positions/appear on multiple platforms (e.g. commentator and presenter, both of which apply to Pearce), so probably better to keep it unless anyone can think of anything better. 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * After becoming a household name in the football world,.... - this just sounds puffy, I'd lose it. Maybe just "Pearce later became an established media performer in both television and radio." or somesuch
 * I felt it was reasonably important to note the timing, as it coincided with her rise in popularity/the beginning of AFL Women's, but simplified to "Outside of her playing career...". 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Pearce grew up in Wandiligong, near Bright,[6] and attended Bright P-12 College - I'd remove this sentence and merge extra material into next sentence to reduce repetition "Her parents separated when she was a child, with her mother and brothers relocating to the Melbourne suburb of Eltham and Daisy remaining with her father in Wandiligong, near Bright. She attended Bright P-12 College"
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

Overall, looks okay. Some prose might need some more massaging. Will have another look after a sleep, which I need now....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:29, 6 June 2021 (UTC)


 * Hawkeye7
 * Remove the hard-coded image sizes
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Someone is bound to ask for ALT text at FAC
 * ✅ Not an expert on how to best word alt text, so let me know if you would like any of them worded differently. 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Honours and achievements section requires references
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Awards should not be in bold
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Note a requires a reference
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)


 * You need to define (and link?) MCL Hawkeye7   (discuss)  20:45, 6 June 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

and, sorry that it took me so long to act on your feedback, but got around to it eventually. Let me know how I've gone/if there's anything else that you think needs tweaking – thanks. 4TheWynne  (talk  •  contribs)  14:27, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

, and, just seeing if you guys felt like throwing in some more feedback? Would like to think that the article's in as good a shape as it's been, but let me know if there's anything more that you think should be done and/or feel free to tag anyone else that you think would be interested/qualified to provide feedback. Keen to get this one to FA status – thanks. 4TheWynne  (talk  •  contribs)  02:07, 2 March 2022 (UTC)


 * Widely regarded as the face of women's Australian rules football and one of its first superstars - "the face of women's Australian rules football" sounds puffy. I'd remove it. Someone else will definitely pounce on this at FAC. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:36, 2 March 2022 (UTC)


 * Otherwise looks ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:40, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ If nobody else has any feedback, I'll start the nomination process and see what others think – thanks! 4TheWynne   (talk  •  contribs)  13:42, 4 March 2022 (UTC)