Talk:Daitō-ryū Aiki-jūjutsu/148794229GANComments

First of all, let me congratulate User:Mateo2006 and User:Bradford44 for what looks like an ongoing effort to get this page to GA status. I think the article as it stands is a great article, well written, and well sourced. I think this article could easily go further and encourage you to work at FA. Anyways, here are my comments in regards to the GA criteria...


 * Well Written
 * Clear Prose, Correct Grammer: Pass, no worries here, the article reads well, even not knowing the names or history I was able to follow the article.
 * MoS: Pass, again the style is fine. The last line of the lead seems a little arbitrary, but a reference to aikido should definitely be made.
 * Factually Accurate
 * References: Pass, not much to say, you have a lot of references, including books.
 * Inline Citations: Pass, great placement of citations, most facts seem to be covered.
 * Original Research: Pass, Everything here looks to be factual
 * Broad Coverage
 * Hits Main Points: Pass, from history to modern usage, a description of the style and techniques, and it's descendents...looks good.
 * Stays on Topic: Pass
 * Neutral: Pass, the unverifiable ancestry was illustrated and explained neutrally, everything else seems straight fact
 * Stable: Medium Pass, It looks like the article was just developed, editors seem to be on consensus for most of it, I only say medium because it's been edited primarily by 2 editors, a peer review from the martial arts project wouldn't hurt.
 * Images: Pass, a good selection of images. As mentioned on the talk page, this article is hurting for an image of the art in practice.

Further Comments: A great article, if you want to go on to FA I would suggest finding a picture of the art in practice. I'd also suggest, as a style preference, that The aiki concept goes before Aiki-jūjutsu followed by Classifications of techniques and finally Organizations and important personages. That way you will have it ordered, a preface to the general practice, a description of the specific practice, details about the practice, implementations of the practice, and implications of the practice. I think it's an entertaining read and would suggest getting peer review from the martial art project. It was a pleasure to review. -Weston.pace 16:40, 3 August 2007 (UTC)