Talk:Daju kingdom/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 21:15, 21 March 2018 (UTC)

Criteria
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Discussion
I have done some light copy editing. Feel free to revert anything you don't agree with, or query here anything you don't understand my reasons for.

Prose.
 * "the ruling ethnicity." This seems a little clumsy. Perhaps "the ruling ethnic group" or similar?
 * "Since the 12th century they were mentioned by a couple of contemporary Arab historians."... a couple of..." is not very encyclopedic. Maybe "two"? Or "several" or "a limited number of".
 * " waged war against an unidentified people named Watkhu". If they are named then they are identified. Possibly "against an otherwise unknown people named the Watkhu"?

References.
 * When a citation covers 2 or more pages could you replace "p." with "pp.". Gog the Mild (talk) 22:11, 21 March 2018 (UTC)

Additional notes
Gog the Mild (talk) 21:15, 21 March 2018 (UTC)