Talk:Daler Mehndi/to do


 * Too many short sentences that halt and stilt the flow of the prose. Like the 2nd paragraph of the section Early life and discovery, I would smooth out the prose and rewrite with some connection between the sentences that flows from point A to point B. Also, I would remove the word "currently" from the sentence "and currently has three children". The section is dealing with the past and the word currently catapults you into the present day. You can allude to the future (like maybe "which subsequently produced 3 children") but don't bring the entire narrative to the present day only to move it back to the past in the following section. In areas like Philanthropy and other activities there are a lot of "He also" in the section that should be rewritten to flow better without repeating that phrase.
 * We tend to hop and skip from different time points. Like in the section 1995-2006: Popularity and controversy, the title lays out the period that is to be discussed and then goes on to describe events in the mid 90's up to present day 2006 and jumps way back to 1992. The car accident narrative stands out because it causes the reader to halt the natural progression they were making in observing the development of Daler's career. This info would be better served in the Early life and discovery section.
 * "What are the "Kissing parties" that is mentioned in 1995-2006: Popularity and controversy?" "What is the value of a rupee compared to a dollar or a Euro?" (Obviously I could answer this by searching elsewhere on Wiki but a link within the article would aid in that) "Is there an English translation for some of the song & album titles, like Tunak Tunak Tun?"
 * The areas that really stand out are Artistry and Philanthropy and other activities. They definitely need to be expanded. As a reader, I found myself interested in what kind of lasting influence Daler has or might have in the music world and in particular his area of music. Has he influenced other artist? Has there been covered or knocks off of his work? In the last section, the "other activities" and reference to his car seem misplaced. What signifigance (to his career or notability) does having a prado and wanting a hummer have? I would like to see the "other activities" expanded but it needs to be focused on what makes up the person of Daler Mehndi and his notability.
 * I would also consider expanding the "External Links" section (Are there any sites where one can download and listen to samples of Daler's work or maybe watch the video that became an internet meme?) and maybe adding a "See Also" section with other relevant topics in Wikipedia. Look for Articles to link to like Music of India that would be a nice springboard to learn more once reading about Daler Mehndi has wetted your appetite.
 * However two of the pictures (The intro one and the music video screen shot) are not of the most stellar quality. They are very pixelated and in the music video you really can't even tell who Daler is. If you wish to pursue this further to FA status then I would recommend a search for more suitable images. FYI - In the music video image, they are ALL him.
 * Add statistics and basic facts.
 * I do not find any mention of immigration scandal he was allegedly involved in. The case is still going on: