Talk:Dan Gilroy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:54, 27 November 2017 (UTC)

I'll take a look and make straightforward copyedits as I go (please revert if I accidentally change the meaning!) and jot notes below Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:54, 27 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead is a bit slim
 * What do you suggest I add? I think it's reasonably long for an article that has nearly 6k prose size
 * Maybe it's just because I am looking at it on a widescreen - yeah not sure either. Need ot think about this Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:02, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Alright, I expanded this a tad bit by adding his frequent collaboration with his wife. Let me know what's up. Slightly  mad  11:31, 2 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Try to minimise (if possible) the number of paragraphs that start with "Gilroy..."
 * Done


 *  Dan Gilroy recalled growing up "in a house where our father was a working writer and working at home. We got to see him write, and that demystified the process of becoming a writer." - rewrite and paraphrase without quoting.
 * Done


 * The Career section is a bit listy. It would greatly benefit from any other information or fleshing out of his involvement with each or any movie. Any extra sourceable material here would be great.
 * I've added some blurb about his new film, though I couldn't really find coverage of his involvement on those films he had previously written as a screenwriter. Slightly  mad  14:06, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Hmm, a pity - I keep thinking there must be something out there....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:02, 1 December 2017 (UTC)


 * as the previous cut had lay much emphasis on the characters - grammar? "lain"?
 * I suppose that's correct, changed. Slightly  mad  14:59, 1 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Hi Casliber, can I get a status update on the review? Did you want me to expand it further with regard to the remaining issues? Slightlymad 05:02, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I meanto to have a look myself to see whether there was anything out there to add. Hang on....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:13, 5 December 2017 (UTC) bleh, you're right...nothing coming up. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)

NB: Earwigs is ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)

1. Well written?:
 * Prose quality:
 * Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
 * References to sources:
 * Citations to reliable sources, where required:
 * No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:
 * Major aspects: (in an ideal world, there'd be some more background on some earlier movies but then, are we surprised that Freejack has been well and truly forgotten about by everybody?
 * Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
 * Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
 * Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: - ok all good now. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)